Just let me start by saying that this is a very good start to a story, I really like the way that you portray your characters :) though... I couldn't help but to pick on some mistakes (not too many, anyway i figured that either you'll dislike me for prodding on your baby or be thankful for the aid (which is the way i react so just wanted to help)) "Perculiar" - peculiar "Teddy, does which house your in matter" - you're in (and it's the same mistake in the next line as well...) "where'll go" - where you'll go "to but him in Gryffindor"- to put him in Gryffindor? "then as one got there robes on"- there is supposed to be their "opened mouthed looking"- open mouthed "as she was shoved into."- shoved into what? Should be shoved in or perhaps shoved into a boat There not too much I hope but some of these troubled my reading and I think it'll be easier to read with just some of those tinytiny corrections :) anyway great start to a story and it really makes me want to read more! *huggles* Report Review
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