Hehehe... yes, the Canadian Academy of Magical Arts is the the biggest school of magic in North America. It's where I go :D I wish...
I have to say that I was not liking Lily at all. She was being such a jerkface to James. I mean, it's not like he was doing anything to her! I got pretty mad at her, especially when she fell on him, and then she blamed him for touching her. She just... erg! And then she as flirting with Stebbins in front of him! Come on Lily! Your perfect guy is right there! Open your eyes girl! Oh well... I know it'll happen eventually.I'll just have to be patient. Good chapter, once again. Let me know when the next one is up!Author's Response: I know, she was being a bit of a you-know-what right there. But don't let that turn you off. She really is a good person. There's just a large amount of anger, feelings and memories that the fiery red head is holding to herself. Lily's going to need to learn how to let it go. It will happen though. I promise it will or else I shall feed myself to Aragog's children. Report Review
And I'm back! I knew it was the Marauders who had set off those Dungbombs! And I was right! Good for me :o)
Oh, Lily. She's so hotheaded that she didn't even listen when James tried to tell her he was head boy. If she knew before, I have the feeling that events in the prefects carriage might have been less...detrimental, shall we say? My favorite lines were most definitely:
“Oi! Still covered here!”
“Dude,” a passing fifth year Ravenclaw said. “Scrougrify!”
“Right,” he quickly used the charm, restoring his robes to their original state.
So funny! Overall, it was another great chapter (although I noticed you spelled Evans with an apostrophe when it shouldn't have had one)! I shall read and review the next one soon! Report Review
i think this is an interesting mixture and ratio of dialogue to description. the first paragraph is ideal, really: i get such a clear view of what's going on and have a really lovely image in my head to begin with. often times, even though we can have a cerebral appreciation for being thrown right into the action, i find that it's very nice actually to know just where we stand as readers.
while i think this is very well-written, there are a few places where there is a lack of a period or comma that are distracting to me because i'm the nitpicking type :P also, titles of books should be underlined or italicized!! :)
i think it's really nice that you've included little details, like the fact that lily is allergic to peppermint, that her mom pesters her about not eating it, that there's a bunch of frenetic motion while really, lily should be leaving.
the last line is ominous--i'm moving onto the next chapter to see what's going on at the platform!!
--lily Report Review
Nice start! I especially liked the way that Petunia was actually sad to see her sister leave. Also, I thought that the way that she teased Lily about her wand was very sisterly. I'll have to keep reading now that I've started... I've simply got to find out about the dungbombs... although I've got an idea who may have caused the smell :o)Author's Response: Thanx! Love your user name btw :) Report Review
hey it's katie. Lovely chapters. Waiting for more. :) Report Review
I'm off to play cheat right now. Toodle doo! Report Review
Good job! Thumbs up! : D Report Review
It was really cool... And funny, too. :D. Report Review
What I really want to know is how her robes tore Report Review
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