I absolutely love this story! It's such a fresh change from the typical James/Lily story set in Hogwarts. Please please please please please don't give up in this story! It's already so good and you are only four chapters in! Can't wait to read more!!

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what an interesting turn of story. i like the idea that lily was the one pining after james! very original. :)

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I'm really liking the storyline to this I think you should keep going!

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This story is amazing, i cannot wait to read more! Please, please, please keep going!!!

Author's Response: I will, thanks so much for reviewing.
Sweetnothings
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I'm reading and I like what you've done so far! So please don't abandon it and give me a new chapter! I need to know what happens with James and Lily!! Why did he reject her? Who is Isobel? When will the mission start?

Author's Response: Hello, thanks so much for reviewing. I won't be abandoning this, don't worry. Answers will come in time...(some in the next chapter)
Sweetnothings
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Hi!! Don't worry, this chapter wasn't at all bad as you think!! I look forward to reading more of it really soon!! ;)

Author's Response: Hello, hahah, thank you i'm glad it's readable. I'll update as soon as I can.
Sweetnothings
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please write more, this is one of the best fics I've read in along time!

Author's Response: Oh wow, high praise. Thank you so much, and I'll update as soon as I can!
sweetnothings
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Yay! you're back...for good? Oh Take That, how awesome were you. God I'm old.
I really liked the fact that you lifted the veil a little bit more on this whole shebang. I just can't understand why James broke Lily's heart and why he's treating her this way. What, did he really thought that he would say no to a relantionship and they would still be friends? Dumbass. And the fact he never told Lily about this Isobel chick, I just want to scream.
What happened between Jame's father and Isobel's? Were James and Isobel betrothed? And that's the reason why he said no? Crazy theory right?
Update soon

P.S.: Don't forget about ABF please

Author's Response: Haha, inessa, your reviews never fail to bring a smile to my face. Thankyou for sticking with me even though i've been gone such a long time. RL was a bit miserable for a while there.
James and Lily's relationship is very complicated, i want to peel it apart layer by layer like an onion - that's the plan anyway.
Thanks so much for reviewing, and I love your theories...
sweetnothings
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i like your story. i was excited to see that a new chapter is up. i look forward to seeing james and lily working together. keep it up

Author's Response: Hello,
Thank you so much for reviewing!
Shall update soon
Sweetnothings
xx

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I love your story :) So please keep writing. I missed you while you were gone.

Author's Response: Hello,
thanks so much for reviewing! I'm so glad you like it, and I will definitely continue with this.
Aw, you missed me, that's really very flattering. I'll update as soon as I can.
sweetnothings
xx

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Brilliant! You must write more! It's exciting to think that this actually might have happened and I think the plot is great.

Author's Response: Hello,
Thankyou, I'm so glad you like, I'm so glad you're reviewing too - really does mean such a lot.
Hahaha, I don't think this actually happened but that's what fanfiction is for right?! Imagining lots of juicy scenarios and playing them out for our own kicks.
Sweetnothings
xx


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I like Sirius, he's so nice :) My door handle is a coat hanger. Haha. Great chapter. Keep going!

Author's Response: Hello,
Thanks so much for reviewing every chapter so far! I love you - no really I do. Yeah, this is the way I see canon Sirius, quite charismatic and gruff.
Thanks again
sweetnothings
xx

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Ooo lots of familiar faces and a pretty blonde. I'm sure I hate her on Lily's behalf already :P

Author's Response: Hahahha,
Yeah the pretty blondes are always there to be hated lol. Thanks so much for reviewing
sweetnothings
xxx


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Aww poor Lily. Let's hope she gets it together. Good chapter.

Author's Response: Thankyou, I'm glad you're reading.
I hope so too.
sweetnothings
xx

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Hello there! I'm here with your review as requested.

This was a good opening chapter! You seem to have an interesting characterization of Lily and I'm curious to see where you take it. This first chapter went well. There was a nice balance of descriptions, thoughts, and actions.

This is a very different James/Lily story. Something unlike anything I've ever read before, so I'm curious to see where this will go. The fact that it was Lily who was after James and James the one who said no is very interesting.

This was very good! I dont have too much else to say. Hopefully I can let you know more as the story develops further! :)

Currently I have a fairly backed up queue. So I'm going to empty it out and then I will come back for the next few chapters. If you haven't heard from me within two to three days, feel free to come request again!

Thanks!

Drue

Author's Response: Hello,
thanks so much for the lovely review. I wanted to make it original and interesting, so I'm glad you think I've achieved that. Hopefully it will continue to be.
Thanks again,
sweetnothings

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Hi, BrightStar here with your review!

Sorry for the delay! Intersting spin on lily/james here - and its nice to see lily not being hyper perfect!

id like to see more context in the story - this happens a year before she dies, smack in the middle of a war. just a thought.

im looking forward to reading more, please feel free to rerequest - this chapter has taken my interest, and i feel for lily already :)

Author's Response: Hello, thanks so much for the review, really appreciate it.
I wanted to make Lily more realistic and relatable.
In this fic, yes, she is in the middle of a war, but she won't be dying until she's had harry etc. So a few years left, I've taken that little artistic liberty. :)
I will re-request.
Thanks again,
sweetnothings

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Woah. This James/Lily situation is certainly nothing that I've ever read before. The direction that you've chosen to take is unique and creative.

I would recommend a beta, however. There are several grammar/spelling errors in each chapter, and a beta can help you smooth those bumps out. It'll make the story a little easier to read and a beta is also great if you ever encounter writer's block.

The only thing I've seen from Lily so far is a dejected, depressed young woman. It seems to be her only side in this so far, and it makes me wonder where the fighter in her has gone. Yeah, she opted to join the OotP, but it was passed over like the whole scene was equal to breakfast.

You've taken an interesting direction with this story, and that will get people hooked on the story. I do think a beta will be able to help you with characterization, grammar and flushing things out a bit more. Right now, there's very little detail or description to what's going on.

I don't mean to be harsh, just honest.

Author's Response: Hello, thankyou, I've read a lot of Lily/James fics and wanted to do something a little different. You're right I do need a beta, I find grammar and proof reading so tedious, lol - I'm such a professional. And yes, I'm trying to add more description etc - I think a beta would help with that.
Lily is dejected, but don't worry she's just at a low in her life at the moment. Things will look up.
Thanks again,
sweetnothings

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There are quite a few grammar issues and run-ons in this chapter. Nothing a thorough proofing or beta couldn't fix.

I do like the twist on James/Lily that you've taken. It's not their typical, cliche relationship that most people write. I'm interested as to where their relationship is going to lead them with this story.

Author's Response: Hello,
You're right, I'm in dire need of a beta, i really hate proof reading :)
I wanted to make it quite original, I'm a bit tired of reading the same dynamic - James pining over Lily. Thought I'd shake things up a bit.
Thanks for reviewing - means so much.
Sweetnothings
xx

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I am pleased that you've made Lily a failure. So many people write her as Mary-Sue-esque, when there's no way she could be. Her situation is something that happens to many ordinary people as well. Fresh out of school, stuck at a temporary job.

Author's Response: Hello, thanks so much for reviewing. Yeah, I wanted to make her relatable and likable. I find she's too perfect in lots of stories.
Thanks again,
sweetnothings

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Keep those chapters coming ! I feel so bad for Lily ! Enjoying the story though ,,,

JilyRonks xx

Author's Response: Hello, I'm so glad you like it so far.

I feel bad for Lily too, I used her at this age because it's so much easier to identify with the underdog than it is with the golden girl of hogwarts lol.

I promise to update as soon as I can!
thanks so much for the review
sweetnothings
xx

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YESSS please totally continue! This is way freakin amazing! Love it!! Cant wait for your next chapter!!

Author's Response: I will, I will, thanks so much for reviewing, I love feedback!
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I really love this! I have never read a fic where the plot is like this! You are doing an amazing job with this story!! :)

Author's Response: Oh thanks so much for reviewing, really brightened up my day. I'm so glad you like it, I promise to continue.
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I can't deny that I'm a little confused at this point. The pairing listed is Lily/James but the summary implies that the couple is merely working towards friendship. Is that true? If it is, it is probably best to change the pairing from L/J to J/OC. It would make sense that they are moving towards friendship given the facts as you've set them up. Right now they're not together *at all* and James feels less than nothing towards Lily. Plus, the time has well passed for Harry to have been born much less conceived ( in canon he was born only two years after they were out of Hogwarts). And even if his girlfriend dies, James is going to need a lot of time to get over her and fall in love again.

Author's Response: Hello, thanks so much for taking the time to review. Okay - firstly, this is still a lily/james fic - the characters timelines are just stretched out a bit - (i.e. they will meet the same sticky end only a little older - I don't think it damages canon too much).
The summary is like that so the entire plot isn't given away, particularly all of Lily's confusion in the earlier chapters.
I agree, at this stage they're not together, but we're still only 3 chapters in and remember this is Lily's pov - we have no idea what James is really doing/thinking in regards to Lily. Also, James' relationship/extent of his feelings are still not made clear at this stage - just alluded to by Sirius/ assumptions made by Lily.
My advice is...trust me and stick with it. All will become clear!
Thanks again for your feedback - lovely long review.
xx

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I really enjoyed it! You should definitely add some more :)

Author's Response: Hello, thanks for reviewing. I definitely will - unfortunately it might take a while though :~ (I'm going abroad for a while)


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Yesyesyes. You should continue!! Your story is SUCH a welcome change from the pathetic desperate James stories. This time, Lily is the one who was rejected, and it's so REFRESHING. I love your story and your writing. Please update soon! :)

Author's Response: I will continue with this, I promise. The only problem is that I can only upload 1 chapter at a time, so it takes a while.
Thanks so much for reviewing - it makes me want to write XXX

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