This is getting me all hyped up to start writing. Ohh yeah! It's good so far! Very dramatic. I'm lovin' it. Though I must say - Marion should have just set Kyle ablaze. What a hoebag.

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Aha the prank that finishes the chapter off cannot get any better! It creates an interesting tension between Marion and Sirius.

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I like the nymph idea. Very, very original! I'm liking it so far!

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I love how the characters were introduced instantly and that the reader is made to already feel apart of the family.

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OMG! Best chapter so far! Fucking finally together! ;D

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not gunna lie, i teared up at the cute bit! loved it!! :D wooo!! :')

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The snog = about bloody time!!! But omfg no that she's still not with him! Marion, you're not rushing into it with Sirius! He should tell her about Lily having words with him! Also, how the hell is Michael in Gryffindor?! :L

The next chapter better be up soon! And there better be lots of flirting ;)

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Actually screamed NO out loud!!! Lmao x

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WHAT! Ithought they got together :( Ahh im desperate for them to get together now

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OMFG! :D ah winning!

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OMG Geegee this is amazing, but they desperatly need to get together already

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WHOA! i love it when boys act sly about liking a girl, but seriously, he needs to tell her. i am in love with these characters and when will James talk to Lilly?? Ah! * grabs jar of peanut butter and spoon * .xxx

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Oh. My. God!! i loved it!! just the twists with the date ; how it seemed so perfect, yet the guys wasn't!! Sirius, tell her now or i will hunt you down!!!

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Your writing style is really good in this chapter. On teeny tiny thing is that you said "However, on the other hand" and it would probably be better to have just one of those (I reccommend "on the other hand" because "however" isn't supposed to start a sentence) Having said that I do use "however" to start sentences because it just seems right sometimes.
Anyway, I love this chapter and I'm all excited for the next one. xxx

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Loving the names! ;D
I bet Kyle turns out to be an arse!
xx

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Ooohhh! He can be sooo crafty :) I am just loving the love hate thing they have going on. Best chapter so far .xx

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Yesss Sirius. You do! Man, I just want these two to get together already. It's so obvious :) Great chapter... Will continue reading .xx

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Ooh tension building I'm excited :D

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Peter is so mean to James - there is nothing wrong with being a snirgin! (snogging virgin) And not that I don'tlove you or anything but when are Marion and Sirius getting together? Hurry up woman!
LOved it though xx

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Hey I really likeds the opening paragraph when it's all from sirius' perspective, I love him more than a little bit.
I liked the end of the chapter as well it was so sweet

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Damn girl!! These chapters keep getting better, I am more in love with Sirius now than I was before .xx Drama could be around the corner... I hope!!

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Uh...no offense but you dO know that Sirius' eye color is a light grey right? Just wondering cuz you said they were brown.

Author's Response: Yeah, I didn't realise until after I wrote it and it's a hassle to change it but thanks for picking up on it :)

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Aww, even the tough ones take a beating. My fave chapter so far .xx

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OOOHHH! THE DRAMA!! i love it, i want something to happen between Sirius and Marion like now!!! .xx

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I am falling in love with Sirius!! he is so cheeky and witty, i love it .xx

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