aww, i hope bollie and cherry become friends. this is really good so far and i cannot wwait to find out what happens next.
I wonder what is going on in james' head, does he love scarlette or is he starting to like Bollie, will she tell him and how will he react? that should be fun to read :)
I love the way you have made Bollie totally unique and i think she is awesome and her conversation with her brain and her list of reason why james should die made me laugh a lot :D
keep up the good work and please update soon
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this is a really good start to the story,and i like how her brain is arguing with herself = )
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How akward! Boobage and all! If I was Cherry I would have ran out of the kitchens or something utterly dramatic. Cherry doesn't seem like she can keep a secret (I cannot get over her name). Poor Bollie!
Good luck with your classes by the way! I'm in the same boat but I'll be able to start writing again by the time this week ends! Oh the life of an undergrad! :DAuthor's Response: Glad you liked it! As you can tell by this incredibly late reply I survived my exams and am now back in the writing saddle... Report Review
Oh lord. As I read this I couldn't help but chuckle. James is so...well...he's such a...I can't even find the right word to describe him. Bollie is doing quite well for an unplanned pregnancy. No one knows, Cherry (poor child) took the blame for what she did with James and she even got to yell at James. He really doesn't seem to be 'bi-polar' but I suppose when he finds out his reaction to Bollie will change. He's a wimp, that's what he is, a wimp and a bit of a dirty 'boy.' I'd use a different word but I can't. Hahaha. Onward to chapter five!Author's Response: Glad you liked it! Report Review
I love Bollie's voice! The list was hysterical. This was my favorite part:
Fertilised the hell out of me in said broom closet while I was drunk on said dubious beverages.
She's too smart for her own good. Her brains make her likeable to me because I hate when people try to dumb down the girl like that's the reason she got pregnant. I can't wait to meet James! I mean truly meet him! I wonder if she's going to outright tell him and he's just either going to flip out, pretend it's not true or something. I'm sure his reaction will make me laugh. I can't wait to see what happens next! :DAuthor's Response: Ha, thanks! I'm glad you liked it XD Report Review
Definitely cliche BUT then it's not cliche. I mean the broom cupboard thing has been done so many times but with Bollie's narration it gives it a whole new twist. She's really a comical character, I do enjoy her already. I like how you confess her life is becoming a cliche but you do it in a way where you're accepting the cliche, making fun of the cliche and then not making it a cliche by getting just the extra step to make it very interesting. I like how you characterize everyone in the very beginning, sort of like a play which is different from anything else I've read. Kind of makes me feel like I'm watching everything happen instead of reading it which is really nice!Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much! I get very annoyed by cliche stories but that doesn't stop me from liking the ideas behind them, so I thought I'd give it a try... Report Review
I stumbled on this by accident and yay! I'm glad I did. This was really interesting and I'm pretty sure you didn't even reach the thousand mark for this chapter. I'm sort of obsessed with pregnancy stories on here. I don't find many goods ones sometimes because people don't pay attention to the true symptoms/cravings and all those jazzy fun things. I already like Bollie as well! She seems like a spit-fire!Author's Response: Thanks! I've actually done INSANE amount of research into the stages of pregnancy and what symptoms you get week-by-week, so hopefully this'll be pretty realistic. Report Review
This story is awesome so far! Really enjoying it. A bit sad that it is on a hiatus now, but I know how life is. Can't wait to read the next chapter!! :)Author's Response: Glad you liked it! Report Review
That was WOW-some (I know, super cheesy).
PLZ keep up with the posting!!!Author's Response: Glad you liked it! I am actually going to be posting the next chapter soon (five months later *bad writer*) Report Review
Jeeej you updated *does happy dance* I ab-so-lut-ly LOVE this story. It's written so well and Bollie is just very awkwardly funny.
I'm sorry to hear that you won't be updating until february or march, but I'm just glad that you're not abandoning it!
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Thank you so much for updated! Little short, but it is better than nothing :)Author's Response: Glad you liked it! More updates soon hopefully... Report Review
It's good she told Cherry because it provides a way for the school and James to find out about Bollie's pregnancy. After all, it isn't so difficult to figure out that Bollie's the girl James slept with if Cherry puts together what she knows.
Hopefully you'll get another chapter out before Spring and we'll get the chance to find out what Bollie does next.Author's Response: Glad you liked it! The school won't be finding out just yet but keep up the speculation, I like when people tell me how they think it'll go... XD Report Review
U SUCK! IVE BEEN WAITING FOR THE CHAPTERS FOR..SO LONG U HAVEN'T EVEN PUT ANOTHER CHAPTER YET?! IM OFFICIALLY ABANDONING THIS STORY AND REMOVE IT FROM MY FAVOURITE :'(Author's Response: Wow, okay, Im sorry you feel this way but in the end you dont have to be mean about it. If you want to un favourite it that is up to you, but I'm sorry, its just fanfiction and at the moment I am trying to take four A level courses and two GCSES even though I am only fifteen, as well as writing two novels and being on gifted and talented extra curricular clubs for four subjects, AND starring in a play, so no offence, but this is kind of not my priority.
I know I should put a note up telling people this, but I think you are being really immature. Please grow up. It's fanfiction. Report Review
Hahahaha, the end of the chapter, that she was still wearing her pyama XD
Can't wait to read more! When will you be updating again? This story will go straight to my fave list :DAuthor's Response: Hehe, I'm glad you liked it XD
Unfortunately updates for this and all my other stories are on hold for a few months, because I have just changed school and I'm taking tons of advanced courses, so I have the hugest workload ever. I will try and get back into this in the new year, though. Hope you stick around, and thanks for the review! Report Review
I love Bollies brain, it's like a journal xD
And I love her name by the way- How did you make that out?
James is a bastard :D
And idk what I shall think about Ruth yet, and the same about Sammy. Hard to tell, we barely know them yet...well Ruth wants to be popular, and is a gossip queen. But that's just a fact. I don't know anything about her personallity..shall be intrestning :DAuthor's Response: I got Bollie because it is actually short for Bolitha... which I know isnt a name either but it sounded like one, but then I decided Bollie should be her actual name, not just a nickname... I dont even know, is the answer to that XD
James is a bit of an idiot, ultimately, but Im hoping he will get more cooperative when I start writing again. As for Ruth and Sammy, they are going to be developed a lot more in the later chapters, if all goes to plan, so I hope you stick around for that! Updates will be slow until next year, I'm afraid, but thanks for reading and reviewing! It means a lot XD Report Review
Another great chapter. I like how you made her clever, and then suddenly not so clever. She's no Mary Sue and I love it :D
It's kinda cliche but I like cliche so it doesn't bother me xDAuthor's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Bollie is becoming one of my favourite characters to write precisely because shes so unpredictable XD Report Review
Woah where have I been? Why haven't I seen your story until now??? Unfair. But as you say..."Better late than never"
I really like where this is going. I totally love Unplanned Pregnancy stories, I don't know why but I do. That's why I was happy when I found this story because I thought I read EVERYONE that's out there, and let me tell you...there aren't that many at all. Not good ones, atleast.
I liked the converstation between Conscious and Subconscious, even though I don't have any idea what those words means. I guess it's a discussion she has in her mind with an imaginary friend, or something...i'm too lazy to check it up right now xD
Alright, i'm off to the next chapter!Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! I have to admit I'm a bit obsessed with unplanned pregnancy fic as well. and I only really started writing this because I had nothing left to read! A lot of them can be very cliche, though, so I'm trying to make this at least a little different.
Conscious and Subconsious are two parts of the brain, the idea being conscious is like the regular voice in your head or the part where you think, and subconscious is the part that runs automatically, so you don't even know its there. Thats why it makes sense for it to know Bollies pregnant before she does. Lol, me and my nerdy psychology XD
Thanks so much for reading! Report Review
update soon can't wait for more chaptersAuthor's Response: Glad you like it! I'll try and update soon XD Report Review
This is seriously good. I'm really liking how Bollie is just kind of like whatever about things that most characters in stories obsess over (clothes, appearance, etc.) and like really has a personality and focusses on the bigger picture. I also like how James is such a sweetie when it comes down to it. Update soon, mkay?Author's Response: I'm glad you like it XD
Its really fun to write a character who's more real, and I'm having a lot of fun developing her personality. Keep reading! Report Review
I am enjoying this. LOL.Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you like it XD Report Review
GAHHH! I love this story already! It's absolutely hilarious and Bollie is awesome! The characters that you made are amazing. I can't wait for more! :DAuthor's Response: Thanks! I'm so glad you liked all the characters, especially Bollie XD
Keep an eye out for the next chapter, coming soon! Report Review
i really like where this is going! Nice twist with poor Cherry! Weird that James doesnt regret it... but i guess I willl find out what happens next soon enough!:^)
update soonAuthor's Response: I#m glad you like it! Look out for updates in about a week XD Report Review
I almost cried when I saw this had been updated! Nice chappie, I liked James's attitude toward Bollie. Everyone portrays James a little differently, it's funny to see who does what- especially if Al is the main character;)
Anyways, Scarlette's reaction was well done but left me with a lot of questions about her personality; is she a one of your typical, slutty popular girls or a blonde sweetheart? More of an Adrian or Grace? I'd love to see more of who she is, if she and James get back together then that may potentially cause problems and she would be even more of a main character than she is now.
FifiAuthor's Response: I'm glad you liked it! It's really still just in the introduction stage still, but you'll be seeing plenty more of all these characters, so the mysteries WILL be solved eventually XD
I'm thinking the next chapter will be in the queue by the end of next week, if all goes to plan, so keep an eye out.
Ta for reviewing! Report Review
Love it!!! ^^ Keep on making me laugh :P
Update soon!Author's Response: Glad you liked it :D
Updates will probably be towrds the end of next week, or maybe a bit later, but I'll try and get it out ASAP.
Ta for reviewing! Report Review
nooo this is the last chapter 4 now!! im gonna go INSANNNEE!!! hahah i LOVE this story! I can NOT WAIT to read more!! keep it up!
xoxoAuthor's Response: Thanks so much! Half of chapter five is already written, so I'll try and get more out probably towards the end of next week... ta for reviewing! Report Review
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