This was very eerie and an excellent haunted take, albeit slightly alternate universe since Tom was not there at the birth of his son and his son did not die, of Merope and Tom's relationship. I felt the suspense as Cecilia told him that she heard the babe crying, his babe, up until the end when Tom not only heard but saw the corpse. It was freaky and really well written. You have such a flair for writing horror so well; I'm always quite startled and scared when I read any of your horror fics. Great one-shot! :) Report Review
This is... chilling. Poe's the best and you gave this story a very creepy atmosphere. It's also very poetic. I thought it was a prose poem at some point. Great job.Author's Response: Thank you so much, Occlument! I'm so glad you enjoyed this one-shot. Happy Holidays!
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You know, I absolutely love it when you write horror! This was a fantastic adaption of Poe's work and made me shiver numerous times.
I do feel for Tom however, opium does strange things to the mind. I almost wanted to give him a hug and tell him everything would be alright. Though, he did commit murder and that is wrong. Shame though that the baby did not survive to cause such havoc that he would.
Although, as AU, I love it all the same. Had Tom Riddle II (Voldemort) died when he was an infant it would have saved the wizarding world a whole lot of grief!
You did a fantastic job! I loved it!Author's Response: Hello Len!
Thanks so much for reviewing! You know I just love your feedback. ^_^ I'm so thrilled to hear that you liked this piece.
Yes, I do feel somewhat bad for Tom as well. His relationship with Merope really unsettled his mind, and, unfortunately, his addiction didn't help much.
As for the AU nature of this fic, I actually wrote a story "Bereft", in which Tom Riddle II is stillborn. Even though I love canon, I think I do have a soft spot for AU, haha. ;)
Again, thanks for everything, Len! It was wonderful hearing from you. Take care and be well!
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here to review and sorry I took so long.
Alright I am typing as I read so bear with me. Firstly, I had to go and revist Ligeia, not having looked at it for a long time. The Raven I am more familiar with.
so here goes.
from the opening line I loved this. Comparing Merope to the Leanan Sidhe...perfection. this line creeped me out: "Something he had not wished for, but gained by chance." gah. gave me the shivers.
you are brilliant at creating atmosphere. that very first section had me chilled. i love it!!
i found part III particularly disturbing. Tom Snr and the baby - what a paradoxical situation, that he could know and yet not know what the son would become. perfectly encapsulated!
"Tom swore to himself, even as his new bride smiled and blushed, that he would soon rid her of her falseness…of everything that belonged, rightfully, to Merope."
okay, that's spooky.
part VII was amazing. such imagery and atmosphere in so few words. your vocabulary is so suited to this sort of work - words that no one else (except perhaps a 18th century Gothic novelist) would use: words like 'sepulcher', and 'shade', and 'hearken'. You have perfect phrasing for this sort of piece - nothing is drowned in words, or imagery. just enough is given and you do wonders with it - the atmosphere in this is incredible!
poe would be proud. I recently did a quick workshop on the way he writes atmosphere with my English students and managed to freak them out more than anything, lol.
love part XI ^_^
from then on in...WOW. i think i said in another review i was awed by you - well, I still am! the ending, the build up to the ending was fabulous. the sights and sounds - there was so much here, so much that was real and terrible and i could see everything!!
beautifully creepy and stunning atmospheric. I know it might seem like i am gushing a little too much here but this was amazing. i love reading your work.
feel free to request another review at any time!!!
i am adding this to my favs.
Kate xxAuthor's Response: Hello Kate!
Gah! I'm so, so, SO sorry it took me over a month to reply to this review. Things just got totally crazy in November...I had to have my appendix out and had tons of assignments due at the same time. You have no idea how terrible I feel for neglecting this for so long. I do sincerely apologize. Your feedback really means the world to me. I cannot possibly express how grateful I am for your opinion. I know this review must have taken you forever to write and I want you to know that I truly appreciate the time you took to share your thoughts with me. In short, thanks so much for the unbelievable feedback! ^_^
Ahem, now onto the proper reply. I'm so glad you enjoyed the Leanan Sidhe bit in Part I. To be honest, I hadn't planned on including the reference, but then it just sort of trailed me throughout the story and I kept on returning to it, haha. I'm really glad you thought it fit!
As to Part III, yeah, that was a bit difficult for me. I mean, I know the baby is actually the evil Lord Voldemort, but I just couldn't imagine any parent handing off their child like that. The only way Tom can rationalize it, I guess, is because he's completely irrational.
And I'm so glad you liked my usage of all those stuffy old words. Before I wrote this piece I listened to a recording of Vincent Price reading "Ligeia" and I just adored all the archaic phrasing and what-not. So yeah, I hope my old-fashioned, outdated vocabulary wasn't too hard to get through. ;)
And yay, you liked the atmosphere!! Thanks so much, Kate. I'm a sucker for atmosphere, although I do think my imagery can be extremely over-the-top, hehe.
Your students are lucky to have done a Poe workshop with you, by the way. I find him the master of creepiness and such a literary genius to boot.
Again, thanks for the unbelievably awesome review, Kate! I was so thrilled when I received this and I really want to thank you from the bottom of my heart for your kind words. And once more, I do apologize taking so long to get back to you. I hope you have a lovely weekend! Take care!
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Oh, my, this was amazing! Absolutely amazing!
Your writing was so elegant and mesmerising, I was honesty astounded! I couldn't look away at all.
I loved reading something in Tom's perspective. I've never really read many stories about him, and I really enjoyed your interpretation.
The baby's cry was genius! It was just so original, and really quite haunting. It was also quite unexpected, which, I think, made me like it even more.
I must say, it was really chilling when Tom thought Cecilia was sort of turning into Merope. It was a real stand-out for me :)
I really, really loved this, and it was such a memorable read! 10/10 - brilliant work!!!
PS: In regards to Willoway, I'll get back to reviewing once NaNo is over...hope that's ok? :)Author's Response: Hello Lizzie!
Thanks a million for the lovely review! As always, it was just great hearing from you. I'm so thrilled that you enjoyed this piece. After rereading some of Poe's work, I just knew I had to incorporate some of his themes into the HP universe and the Tom/Merope pairing seemed like a perfect fit.
Again, thanks so much for the awesome review! I really do cherish your feedback. Take care and be well!
PS I hope NaNo went well for you. ^_^ Report Review
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