Wow... I will confess that's a word I use a lot, but this time is really wow. The description was nothing but incredible. It wad poetic and it showed deep feelings. I do love when writers put accent on feelings.
I've always thought of the possibility of Narcissa marrying someone like Lucius because of the blood status. What you have here is really something new: money issues.
Breaking slowly "ike a china cup falling in slow motion". That was an incredible comparison. Also, I really loved the moment of trying to fly. The hope of being free... I can't really tell how much I adored your writing. This is going to my favorites!
GryffindorAuthor's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you!! Lovely review (: Report Review
WOW is all I can say it's realy good you should keep going.Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review (:
This was originally a one shot...do you really think I should continue? Report Review
gosh frenchi if i go to france it'll only be for a couple of days. on the 3rd of march i am going to england, wales, and maybe france to visit family. we already spoke about this. it was when i was possibly going to see Z but now she's back in Australia. Iz-Iz has been pestering me about how im copying her!
Anyway, i'll wait for you at Wendy's bustop like i have before so youd better walk past! Maybe this weekend we should get together. Writing from a boy's point of view is hard by the way!
xxx Your Wannabe Italian But Actually Lebanese Australian English Irish Scottish friend.
p.s i havent actually read this story but i'll get round to it soon. and update Pheonix already! Report Review
you used a lot of beautiful figurative language in this one. it's well written, but I like your other writings much better (I suppose since I can relate to them better) anywho, good job :)Author's Response: Thanks (:
I know, this isn't really my best peice of work. I know I could have done better, but it's just a heap of scribblings...
I was bored, ok!
ANYway, thanks for being my one and only reviewer for this story! I appreciate it (: Report Review
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