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Review #1, by VioletBlade Mass Escape

16th October 2010:
Lovely first chapter Sophie! (: I really like the plot development so far, and all that. Some CC: It was a little confusing that you transitioned from when Bellatrix and them were in jail to a week later. Perhaps, in the future, if you ever make changes like that, just let it show like, 'One week later...' (Although, I know that line is terrible :P) And the other thing was that it was confusing when you changed POV's but didn't tell us who the main character is. Eventually, yes, we found out, but it was little hard to get at first. All in all, beautifully written and lovely story! Can't wait for updates! 9/10

Author's Response: thank you for the kind review! I will defenitely take your advise into consideration. I found that it was difficult to change from POV and I think that in the future, I might just not do that anymore :p
Thanks again! I am currently writing chapter two, so hopefully, it'll be up somewhere next week :)


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