Hello, ravenclaw_princess from the forums report at long last.
This was a really sweet story and it went with the song beautifully. It was quite short, but it worked really well for this story. You said what you needed and conveyed what you wanted to without going over the top.
I could really feel for Angelina, her emotions came through really clearly and I was very absorbed in the story whilst I was reading it.
The spelling and grammar was really good, but I did one error (repeated twice) in the last paragraph.
your = you're
But other than that minor error, this is a beutiful and quite emotional story and I think you've done a good well.Author's Response: Eep, Thank you (': â¥
It's great to see you like it. I appreciate the review! ;D
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Hello! This is TenthWeasleyWriter from the forums with your requested review. =] And I'm sorry it took so long for me to make my way here!
Overall, I thought this was a very lovely one-shot. ^^ I love twin fics and you certainly did a very good job with this one. It wasn't too short, so you got out everything you needed to as far as storyline. But you didn't drag it out either, as many writers tend to do just to get out a longer word-count. It was the perfect length, so kudos to you for that!
The plot itself was sweet as well, and I shan't lie - I teared up a bit. ^^ That's a great thing that you were able to evoke such emotion!
You've done a great job here with your fic, and I really don't have any criticsm - well done! Thanks for coming by the forums and requesting. ^^Author's Response: Eeep! Yay! Thanks for the lovely review. It's good to know it's made a good impression. I was especially pleased about the comment about my length because I was a little worried that it was too short, but again I didn't want to drag it out and make it boring to read..
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Here I am with your requested review! :)
+Usually I have a 'negative' catagory, but on this one... I just couldn't think of anything as negative.
+This was very short, and I think it actually complimented the story. I don't get that feeling very often, but this just kind of clicked with you, you know?
+ I was starting to tear up. I always think of this as a good thing when I read stories where one of my favorite characters die, and Fred was DEFINITLEY one of my favorites.
Sorry if this is as constructive as you were hoping, but I just don't think there is any way to improve this. It was just so good! :)
(LiveLaughLoveHarryPotter on the forums)Author's Response: Aww :') This is a really touching review. I'm really glad you liked it that much to say that. That's made my day (even if it is closing right now..) This was the last thing before I'm going up to bed so thank you for the positive way out on a day ;) hehe.
Thank you so much
ps. that rating is AMAZING, thank you again!xo Report Review
Hello. I sort of wondered here and this story instantly made me click. It made me put down my tweezers & stop tweezing my eyebrows. Which is practically makes you a genius, as I'm known for tweezing my eyebrows. It's just whenever I think I'm finished, I find another hair.
But, as you've noticed, I've digressed.
This was beautiful. I love George/Oc. I just like the idea now, even though I found it weird at first. Angelina's voice really spoke throughout this; it was fluid and you can really come to grasp with her pain and how she started to heal a little bit.
The song suits it perfectly. I've never listened to that one of hers only once & the boy who murdered love.
Diana got a nice voice & I'm glad she's wearing shoes now.
In all brilliant one shot, I loved it.
Hope you're having a good day,
/sexydoorframes.Author's Response: Haha! I love Diana Vickers, This is one of those of the album that no-one gets the chance to hear unless they listen to the album, obviously. So it's not well known, but I think the songs beautiful. ^.^
I'm glad I got you to read it, And wow. Even to stop you plucking the eyebrows ;) I feel good now hehe.
Oh, and It's good you feel Angelina's charrie is good; I was afraid of under-doing that you see.
Thanks for the lovely review Keely :)
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I can't believe this doesn't have a review! Well but no worries I'm here XD Anyway let's get started.
I loved it. I think it's how Angelina's would've felt, you manged to give her a great portrayal. And I got goosebumps (it's the closest I get to crying XD)
DalihaAuthor's Response: Hehe. Well, the story has a review now:)!
I think personally, its because of my song choice, yet i'm still proud - I do love Diana Vickers!
And thank you! I'm glad my story touched you in that way, that was the feeling I was going for :)
Thanks for the review!
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