Great story. I loved it! Report Review
Great! I liked your story. I would love to see that one. Especially Snape really smiling, sounds like the end of the world actually. Only one thing- wouldn't Lily be upset about Longbottom and his friends getting pranked? Report Review
Heeelloo, I'm here with your review!
First of all, I looove that Lily and Severus are teaming up against the Marauders. I rarely ever read fanfics with Severus and Lily portrayed so realistically as friends. I really enjoyed that so thank you for writing it! Also, I looove the prank! You're brilliant! I have such a difficult time with coming up with interesting pranks and yours was definitely interesting, clever, and very funny! I loove that they couldn't see themselves!
What else can I say? The story flowed perfectly, there wasn't a point in it where I was confused or lost or feeling like this part was unnecessary. Characterisation: I think you did an amazing job with Severus, I could definitely see the distaste he has for the Marauders but without it being too overbearing. Also, your portrayal of Lily was pretty spot on in my opinion, she's cute and sweet and I really like her like this. I'm not sure when this was supposed to be set, but I'm assuming at around fifth year or something. As I said before, my favourite part of this whole story is just Severus and Lily's friendship. It's cute and believable.
Criticisms? None that I can think of. I didn't see any glaring error, however there was this one bit:
"She just rolled his eyes." --> I think you meant 'her' eyes, hehe.
Other than that, it was a great story! It was really cute and good and just an easy humorous and fun piece to read! Great job!! xAuthor's Response: Hello! :)
Thank you, I'm glad you liked that! And wow, that's great to hear :) Haha, thank you for reviewing!
Really? I can never come up with pranks either, actually, so I just went with this - it's really good to know that you thought it was interesting and funny, so thanks a lot!
It's great to hear that you think the flow was good as well, so thanks. I'm also glad you thought the characterisation was good :) I kind of hope they really were like this at some point in their lives... (you know, even though they're actually fictional characters :P)
To be honest, I was thinking about third or fourth year for this - before Severus got too close to his Slytherin friends who dabbled in the Dark Arts. And I'm glad you liked their friendship so much, that's really great!
Oh, haha, that's pretty stupid :') Will definitely edit that out, thanks for pointing it out!
Thanks a lot, I'm glad you think so!
Thank you very much for your review (and all the compliments in it)!! Report Review
Hi! It's Livingfairytale from the forums with your review! =) Thanks for requesting, feel free to request anytime you want.
First of all, I think the idea of Lily & Severus pranking the Marauders is brilliant and very original. I haven't come across a story quite like this one yet.
I like your writing style- you really pull the reader into the story, which is a great thing. The characterization was perfect; not out of character, just perfect. I always imagined Lily as a quiet, good behaving girl who would never lower herself to their level. That's probably why I liked this one-shot so much: it wasn't cliche, boring or predictable. You kept me reading to the end. Honestly, I enjoyed every part of it, and I can be pretty picky when it comes to one-shots. I often find them not satisfying because they're so short, but this one was brilliant.
All in all, a great story. Thumbs up!
-- LivingfairytaleAuthor's Response: Hi! Thanks, I'll keep that in mind ;)
Thank you, I'm glad you think so! The idea just hit me one night and I simply had to write it :)
That's great to hear, thanks! And I'm glad you thought the characterisation was perfect - talk about a big compliment! :D Your idea of Lily kind of matches with mine, although I do think that she might have her moments, like here. And they don't expect a thing ;)
Thank you, it's always good to hear that a story isn't cliche or boring or predictable :) And that's awesome as well, I'm very glad you liked the story!!
Thank you very much for your review!! Report Review
I really liked this story - and it was very well written! Nice job!Author's Response: Thanks a lot :D That's great to hear, thank you! Report Review
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