I love the details you used in the story! I simply can't wait to read the next chapter! (: 12/10 Report Review
This was amazing. I really loved this, and you are most definitely a talented writer. I absolutely loved how you started it. The way you described it.. I realised who's story this was from the first sentence (and with help from the chapter image!) Anyway, the descriptions at the beginning were just very vivid. You really got across Regulus' last moments absolutely amazingly. His last thoughts.. the repetition of "I'm dying", really emphasised and got across what he was feeling.
As for the second section, it was equally brilliant. I loved how it was just a completely different moment, with a completely different atmosphere. But, it was still amazingly written. I just loved how you wrote Regulus' perspective. His characterisation is just so perfect! I liked Sirius already somewhat rebelling, and I liked how they played some football too, before getting told off by their dad. I also liked the bit with Narcissa. The only thing that didn't make sense was this sentence: "But who else do I got?" (Did you mean, "do i have?") Other than that, I was utterly wowed by this fic, and really loved it! Talented writing!
- maskedmuggle, Ravenclaw :) Report Review
I'm so fond of Regulus stories and this one has some great potential. I'm very excited to see how this will unfold.
Your writing is very good, although I did catch a few errors (they can easily be fixed by proofreading).
Update again soon!
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