aaahhh poo! and my favorite character is Peter!! dunno y but he is! and my favorite line is "Wait… what was my point again? Merlin, I seem to be doing this a lot lately!"

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Please hurry up and post more! This is amazing! :)

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Sweetlovelygirl here from the review tag!
This is such a nice story. I really like Deora and you made a great character of her! She has a personality I really like and admire. And I also like the fact how she would try anything just to stay friends with Petey. I can imagine that it must have been hard to write about so many (almost-)OC's, but you really did a great job on that. Kieran and Albert remind me or Fred and George, obviously. Had that been your intention or did you just want to create two funny prank-playing brothers? I had never really thought of Peter's parents as such strict, muggle-born hating people. but it does explain Peter's character and you did well ono that. He is just so cute! I mean, I can just see him in my mind as a small, a bit chubby, shy boy and I just want to hug him! It's alright that you changed the POV because I can see why it had been necessary. There was one error I saw, but I can't seem to find it anywhere now. Great first chap I would say!
Xxx SLG

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finally Peter gets shown some respect :D

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LOVEITLOVEITLOVEIT KEEP UPDATING!! I can't wait!

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Hi :)

PLEASE UPDATE THIS!!
I'm dying to know what's going to happen!!
I love this story. It's so funny and I love all the characters.
Deora is probably my favorite. The Aunt Helena :) she cracks me up.
I really have no idea what's going to happen with Deora & Sirius' relationship. The only thing that I'm guessing is that Sirius will be the first to admit he has feelings for her. He doesn't seem to have any real qualms with bonding with her and starting a relationship. Though I could be wrong. I get the feeling that he's become absolutely crazy about her (and I hope he has! :) ) and Dorea just refuses to realize it. I can't wait to see how it plays out!!

Please update soon?! It's December...not late September...please?

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Hi
I love this story!!!
I love that there's been more of Mary and Remus now. It seems everyone is included.
The fight between Sirius and Deora was really intense!
One thing I would suggest is adding more magic. Like hexes and such. Like when she thought something was going to come and eat her, you could include little things. Like 'she gripped her wand' or something.

Anyways, please update soon! I love it!

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Hey :)
I love this so far! I really love Deora and Dorcas and James and Peter and Sirius. Sirius became a lot more interesting in this chapter. More complex. So I like him a lot more now :)
And I loved James :)
I think you should put more of Mary, Lily, and Remus in, though. They're not mentioned very often. Especially Mary and Remus. Lily at least is mentioned sometimes but I feel like I don't know Mary yet.
Anyway, great chapter!
And she may be a little insane, but I guess I am too because I found that to be really funny. Sort of ironic that Sirius was in a sort of argument and hating her and then decided randomly to defend her. I really liked that, though, because it showed how he can be really loyal and adorably protective.
I think Deora must be rubbing off on him, too, because I think normally in the wizarding world people are more prone to hexing each other than punching.

Please update soon!

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This chapter was absolutely wonderful :)
So funny -the part with Sirius- I bet now she won't wear that locket all the time! At least I wouldn't. I would probably keep it in my pocket most of the time after that, just in case... Lol.

Love it, please update soon!

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I LOVED this chapter!!
It was HILLARIOUS. :)
I can't even list all the moments that were funny. There were too many :)
Here's 3:
This paragraph:
"It was sickening...What pray tell am I rambling about?
And about Slughorn: "He probably skipped in meadows in his free time and collected butterflies or some happy crap like that."
And when she said "Yes? Well screw you, it is."
Anyway I also love her character, violent tendencies included. She's such a wonderful friend and really funny.

I can't wait to read more :)
Please update soon!

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Hi :)

I'm really loving this so far and the last part was hillarious!!
I really like Deora and the girls although I don't think you talked about Mary as much as you did Lily and Dorcas.
And I like how you're making Peter more complex. Naturally I've never been a fan of his character, but I did always think that he must've had some great qualities about him that caused him to be a Marauder. I like how you're showing what other people must've liked about him before his personality became all warped through the intimidation of the war.
Really looking forward to the rest of the story!
Please update soon!

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Update soon, please or I might... you know... die... or something 10/10

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Hey! I just started reading your story and I'm loving it so far!

Poor, poor Mary though. To be honest, I was thinking she had a crush on REMUS the whole time, not Sirius! I wouldn't have thought Sirius was her type...and it would suck to see her broken-hearted. :(

oh well, I might as well continue reading!

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so i actually really like this story... doesn't happen often with sirius/oc's... keep it up :) remember to keep original! :)

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I LOVE THIS STORY! It is too frickin cute! I want to see what happens between Lily and James next. And definitely have people find out about the locket! Maybe by walking in on her talking to it?? Anyways, can't wait for the next update!! :)

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Whoa. Okay. I think you pulled off the Deora/Sirius thing pretty well, actually... Good job, and keep updating! (:
~Khanh

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Er... I'm a bit confused... I think this chapter was supposed to come before the previous one! XD
~Khanh

Author's Response: Ahhh! So sorry... I think when the server went down, they switched my chapters by accident or maybe I did that myself. :/ But anyway, sooo sorry if that confused you!! Anyway thank you sooo much for the lovely reviews. Will be replying to each one once i'm back from holiday!! xxx

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Spending a night together under the stars, their first kiss, and the inevitable "Sirius/serious" joke all in one chapter! Yay! (:
~Khanh

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Oooh, some more dramatic plot complications. Bravo. :DDD
~Khanh

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Yay, a beater on the Gryffindor Quidditch team! I don't know why, but I found the punching thing hilarious too. LOL. XD
A few punctuation mistakes, but otherwise it was a pretty good chapter. (:
~Khanh

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LOL. This story cracks me up, especially the last bit with her deceased aunt. XD
~Khanh

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Lolol. Only the what... second day of term? And Deora has already punched Sirius twice! XD
Some good stuff right there. :DDD
~Khanh

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Haha, I think this chapter was a great way to introduce things, especially the Sirius/Deora bit! (:
~Khanh

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Great start to this story... I love it so far. Peter's and Deora's friendship adds depth to a character that had a previous bad connotation. I'm glad you made him out to be a sweet, innocent, maybe-not-so-brave 10-year-old and not a completely hateable villain, like in other stories. Deora also seems like she's going to be a hilarious character... Great job and keep up the good work! (:
~Khanh

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FINALLY you update. lol i loved it. update when you can. 9/10 =]

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