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Review #1, by Storyteller The Best Thing

10th February 2011:
I was looking for a taylor swift fan fic cause I have written 1 myself on 'You Belong with me'.

I ADORE THIS SONG-MINE!

But it only got me to your fic. What kept me there was your almost poetic style of writing, and your likable characters. i agree with your other reviewer that your vunerable characters feel more humane and likable.

All in all, a really good job.

There's one logical error that confused me for a while. Please correct it if and when:

Elle says that she was 7 when her dad left and 'sitting there by the water' occurred on the first anniversary of his leaving. That means Elle is eight, and Lysander is described as:

her eyes falling on the man that was sitting to her left.

She tells him she loves him, and a few months later they move in together! BUT SHE IS EIGHT!

My suggestion? Remove the 'first' from the 'first anniversary'.

Really really good job.

Author's Response: Ah, I'm really happy to hear that you liked the story! Taylor Swift songs are quite easy to write stories to, aren't they? :)

I'm glad you caught that! I didn't notice, honestly, but I'll definitely change that asap! Thank you so much for the lovely review! :)


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Review #2, by LovelyMioneWeasley The Best Thing

14th December 2010:
I was perusing your page because I'm such a big fan of Rose Weasley's Guide and the sequel, Scorpius'. And I was shocked to find that this little gem had NO reviews. What a bummer. Its a brilliant little ficlet.

I really REALLY enjoy Elodie. I can't even begin to describe how much I enjoy her because really, its hard to find a semi-sensitive and vulnerable OC on here sometimes. Every OC you read about is either particuarly feisty or just plain rebellious. It was such a refresher to ready some plain ol' vulnerability and a girl with real fear.

Their relationship was very believable and I enjoyed Lysander's character highly. I give this whomping 10/10 with the hope that more people will find this jewel soon.

LMW

Author's Response: I'm really happy to hear that you liked it! This one-shot was really close to my heart in some ways, and I was going through a Taylor Swift phase so I just wrote it all out. I also wanted to introduce a new character, who I was hoping to write a story on in the future, and expand on a minor Next Gen character (since they're my favorites).

But I'm really glad that you enjoyed the story. I hope others follow your example :3 Thanks so much for the review!


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