Hey, congrats on being the first to finish writing for the contest!
So, I'm not going to make suggestions because I know (obviously) what I like and what it takes to win, and I don't really want to give anyone an unfair advantage, yadda yadda.
I really think the way you characterized Draco was done really well. I know that the combination of song and character was tricky, but you did well :D
I'm really impressed. Good luck!
By the way, spelling/grammar is quite excellent!
P.S. I will be rereading it at the end, if you want to edit it, I will be looking at that version. :D Congrats!Author's Response: Thanks :) I'll probably be leaving it, but then again, I may decide to change it, it's kind of one of those things that you just never know (I was kind of torn on the idea, because I wanted to stretch it out, but at the same time, not really sure that if I did, if it would be complete in 5 chapters... one of those, either I have to compress it or it would end up stretching out really long, I'm weird like that). I've thought about really describing the time he's at St. Mungo's, but then, it might kind of get boring (as well as boring to write). But I'm really glad to have to a chance to at least let the story get some attention, since I had so much fun writing it, and then it was just kind of left out to dry :)
Thanks for the kind review :) Report Review
Wow, good job. Props to you for actually finishing the challenge. I think its really well written and I enjoyed reading it. Draco was (as you said) was very OOc but I did like him that way, makes him more loveable. I was a little confused as to why Fred was there if it was post-hogwarts, but other than that it was exellent!Author's Response: The only reason I still had Fred there was because as I was viewing it in my mind, I just don't think it would have worked as well (such as the two of them finishing each others sentences).
It was so much fun to write. I had so much of it written and then I had trouble with the end, because I wanted to keep it as a one-shot, but at the same time, I felt like it was going on and on and on. It also made me laugh. If it would have been in the ToS to have them actually be singing and dancing the song, I think I could have made it much better. So that was why I tried to suggest that was going on without actually saying it was happening, if that makes sense. I kind of wanted it to be where he starts to dream, and then has trouble differenciating between what was a dream and reality, and kind of goes crazy. But then, that would have made it way way too long. Someday I may turn it into a short story (or maybe a short story collection or something and use a different song for each chapter.)
But again, I thank you for coming up with this challenge, and I really enjoyed it! Report Review
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