Ok i was meant to review ages ago i just kept hitting the next chapter, without stopping. So here's what i think of all 5 chapters.
I always wanted to read a story of how everyone reacted to Harry been dead and such and you presented it perfectly. The ability you had to write so well, to the point where we could all see it clearly within our own minds. I believe every Harry Potter fan has thought of what the Weasley's and others would of gone through at that point but you opened it to a reality more than just thought. I was intrigued from the first word and i wish to thank you for the chance to read such an amazing story. You're definitely an author that i'll watch.
Your story was captivating, emotional and intriguing and i couldn't of expected any better as this was just perfect!
10/10Author's Response: wow, I really appreciate your comments and Im very glad you enjoyed it so much. Report Review
Can't wait for your next chapter.
I must say I love your writting style. Report Review
Love love love, your story Report Review
Ahh, one of my favourite stories I have read on here. Report Review
Love, this story you have written. Report Review
Perfect. I think you did that so well, captured the characters and the mood perfectly. Report Review
very good, please update soon!!
If you want, I have a few, two, stories of my own. But I'm fixing the song fic at the time, so... yeah. Report Review
Another great chapter and so glad there's more to come!! Report Review
I lov your story...
I have always wondered what would have ron and hermione have thought of when voldemort told them harry died
its reallly good ...
i think u should write about what harry said to ginny when they finally met after the battle
10/10Author's Response: thats coming in the next chapter, thanks! Report Review
You do know, you've sent me to heaven with this fic. It's the fic I've been searching for for years! Thank you for writing it!!
Just a little typo that I spotted in this chapter, near the end you wrote, 'moment' in the sentence 'there was a massive moment of creatures...'
Keep up the brilliant work!Author's Response: Thanks so much! Report Review
Again, a super chapter!! I love the way you ended this chapter, I thought you did a brilliant job with that, along with the rest of it :) You write the characters so well...I'm speechless, they are just perfect. Great job!! Report Review
here's the dealio, I saw this snazzy sounding story, popped it into my favs then read, I think you had 3 chapter up at the time, and I loved it so much I couldn't stop reading it to post a review, so now that I have a few chapters to read now I'll go back and review.tehehehe.
I've always been searching about a fic that is based on the missing moments...and I am super delighted that I came across this AMAZING fic!!!
Just want to say that I ADORE this story and I really hope that you keep posting it :D Report Review
Woot Woot! Go Harry! Report Review
YAY! Update *dancing*
I particularly loved this paragraph:
"Harry Potter stood there, alive and whole. He seemed to tower over everything else, like some mythic figure that had been sent down from the great beyond. Some thought he was a ghost, a new inhabitant returning to the place in life he had loved most. But no, he was real and solid, and his eyes held a fury that none save the living could ever hold. And those eyes saw no one and nothing, save for Voldemort. "
Only one chapter left though *cries* *dries eyes*
Hope you've got some other stories, coz if you do they are going to be read and reviewed by moi.
Saffiecat911 Report Review
Excellent chapter; nicely written and entertaining.
I can't wait for the next chapter! Report Review
This is such a great and well written story.reminds me hell a lot of DH, it's like Jk wrote those missing moments! You're great, keep it up!
Lana Report Review
Can't wait for the next chapter!! Report Review
Brilliant... have to keep reading... :-) Report Review
This is just SO GOOD!!! Love it, love it, love it! Report Review
This was really good and so true to character. I really like the way you portray Ron and Hermione and I love their reaction to realizing he's gone. (By the way, I wrote a similar scene as well in one of my stories and I think yours is better!).Author's Response: I want to read it!!! Report Review
Awesome can't wait for the next chapter!!!Author's Response: It should be up later today! thanks! Report Review
Another great addition to this story.
I do have a couple things that bothered me as I read.
The first thing it that you use a lot of dialogue taken directly from the book. I know that it is great dialogue but I think you should check the TOS just to be sure if it's alright to use it so freely. Maybe you just need a note at the beginning of the chapter saying this isn't yours, I'm not sure.
The second thing is that I found this chapter harder to read. I had to re-read a couple sentences because you either forgot words or just the structure made it hard to read. I think you should go through this chapter again or maybe have a beta read it because it is such a great story, you wouldn't want people not reading it because they find it too hard to understand right?
All in all, I can't wait for the next chapter!!Author's Response: Oh, thank you for letting me know! I have a really bad habit of that! I'll go back and fix it asap. Report Review
Wow, really, keep it up, you have great writting skills. I feel sucked into this story, living it with them. The emotion is perfect and the choice of words makes your story flow, easy to read. Report Review
This is a really good beginning to an original idea. I really liked it and can't wait for more!
If there is one comment I can make though, it's that I noticed a lot of typos, which is weird because I'm the queen of typos and don't notice them on my own stories...
Keep it going, it's a really good piece you have there! Report Review
EEP!! I love it so far!! I've always wanted to know what happened in those missing moments. Like what were Ron, Hermione, and Ginny thinking and feeling? I can't wait to read the rest!!!
-Graceyn Report Review
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