I enjoyed your take on Peter Pettigrew, a character most felt was underdeveloped in the books, and completely unsympathetic (until his last moment, when he almost redeemed himself...).
I liked reading the thought processes, and the detail to which he is stressing over his NEWTs.
There are some awkward sentences where the tense feels wrong, like you've switched between present and past. I know inadvertently switching tenses is one of my most frequent errors when writing, so I thought I'd point that out.
It's short wordcount-wise, but goes into great detail and thus seems longer than it actually is.
One thing I didn't understand, although I haven't read "From Marauder to Madness", so maybe this is explained there, what is a Dux?
I love the last paragraph, I think it perfectly concludes and sums up this one-shot and gives good insight into Peter's 17 year old self.
Thanks for participating in my challenge! Winners will be announced shortly!Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review.
When I wrote the Peter stories it was as a challenge to myself to write a character that not many people write about.
I do have a problem with switching between tenses, English teachers over the years have pointed it out plenty of times, yet I still seem to make the same mistakes.
A Dux is the top of student of the year academically.
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