Well that just completely made my day. :) I usually say that after RECEIVING a review, but this was just so... gah! Lovely. And heart-warming.
You've characterized Percy so, so well here. I can't even begin to describe how happy that makes me. I actually have a teensy-tiny crush on Percy, believe it or not (and don't judge me just because he's a fictional character :P). And he's never, ever written, and it just seems to me like people don't give him the attention he deserves. Anyway, you wrote him gorgeously. From your very first paragraph he's got such a strong voice and is all ready an opinionated, stubborn individual, but he's so LOVELY at the same time. I can't really describe it. Anyway, it was lovely. LOVELY.
And your writing! I've always been an admirer of your writing, dear, but this was just... wow. It blew me away. And it was so simple and short but it takes such talent to write a character like you just did, and so obviously you're just bursting at the seams with talent-y talent that I am so infinitely jealous of.
Brilliant job here.
xx Rin Report Review
That was great. I agree, Percy's POV would sound like this. This sounds so heartfelt, and sometimes its easy to forget Percy had heartfelt feelings what with him being a "Ministry-loving, family-disowning, power hungry moron" and you don't get his good side until the end of the 7th. I wonder about him sometimes. Report Review
Wow, I'm impressed. Its easy to forget about, ignore, or simply trod on the character of Percy Weasley. From his actions in JKR's novels he's easy to dislike until he redeems himself towards the end. That is why I am SOOO thrilled to find a story that pulls him apart a bit, so to speak. I am most fascinated by characters like him and the writings that feature him. I don't know how old you are, but you are likely (or will be) familiar with the term "stream of consciousness." If it happens that you are too young (and writing way above your level, I might add) the terms refers to an author's ability to, in very simple terms, write the way our minds think, following a stream of thoughts. This is a really good example of that. You really got into his head and it feels very much like experiencing real thoughts. Once again, I am very impressed. This is a really mature, surprising, and worthwhile piece of writing. In short, well done. Report Review
WOW! What a story! Brilliantly written, touching, honest. This is the kind of story you could send into a magazine, it's fantastic! Great job!Author's Response: Thank you so much! *blushes profusely* I'm so glad you liked it. :) XOXO, K. Report Review
That ending was unexpected with the serious and pretty grim tones of the rest, but when I think about how happy he is at the end - okay, as happy as Percy could ever be - it reveals just how lonely he must feel and how much he loves his daughters. That ending wins many awards for cuteness, and the contradiction between beginning and ending, hellos and goodbyes, is striking and something the reader can't easily forget.
If JKR wrote perspectives from each of her characters, I'd say that Percy's POV would sound a lot like this. He rambles, but it's because his brain works like that, each thought connecting to the next. I thought he'd be linear, but I like the idea of thoughts going in swirls - it makes more sense when one pays attention to one's own thoughts. It's like a giant game of word association. And what's most perfect about the way you've portrayed his thoughts is that he doesn't remember breakfast or the banal, but he's extremely careful with other details, and that's very much like I'd imagine Percy to be.
You could definitely call this another stream of consciousness story - it so accurately depicts a person's thought process. This was really good - you pull of Percy with excellence, not that I'm surprised. ;)Author's Response: Susan! Homg I have reviews of yours I need to get responses for. Also I need to just, you know, REVIEW you. But thank you so much for r&r!
Haha! I actually had had the idea that it was Percy picking up his girls from Hogwarts at the start of the story, but all the way through I was trying to convince myself, I think, that he was awaiting someone else - and I doubt he and even I knew who that person was. Of course I had to throw in the cutesy ending! Poor Percy does deserve the slightest bit of happiness, even if he wasn't quite so nice earlier on.
Ooh. *blushes* I'm so glad you think so - having never written Percy before, his voice is really rather quite difficult to pin down, so as you mentioned, I just went with a more stream-of-consciousness style, in the hopes of channeling him better that way. As for thinking about thinking, I get the feeling that's something he constantly does. At least, I hope so. Thank you so much! I'm so glad you found him to be at least slightly in character.
Thank you so much for reviewing, Susan - and I think it definitely -is- a SoC story. xD Much love! XOXO, Kalina. Report Review
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