I really enjoyed your story! The interactions between the Weasley cousins are vivid and funny, and the action descriptions clear without being too graphic. (that's always a challenge for me, too) Louis's phone call from inside the beast really made me laugh! I liked that you kept Louis's point of view throughout, especially his perspective from inside the chimaera. There are a few little errors (a few typos, a few tense disagreements) but overall, this is a solid piece of work. The ending was cute, I liked that Louis was more afraid of what Fleur would say than of the chimaera. Thanks for participating in the challenge, and I hope you had fun playing with a different genre! Report Review
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