Well. Awkward turtle indeed. The, and I quote, "Awkward Turtle thang"? Wu Tu actual Fu?
ROFLOL JKJK MO!
Have you been drinking a little too much pla- wait, better not finish that sentence :P ROFLOL
Nah, I'm guessing it's more ra- oh, no, can't say that either :D
QK Author's Response: lol. you have got to stop doing this :) and great user name by the way! made me chuckle :D Report Review
T makes me sad to see good old georgey like this. He's meant to be happy and cheeky! Neverless- love the story!Author's Response: thank you very much :) Report Review
I think its pretty cool, I hope Roxanne gets with Orc.Author's Response: thank you ;) I hope so too... Report Review
I'M WATCHING YOU.
LOL, jk, you know it's me :P aw, why no reviews? IT'S JUST ME AND ISHLA!!! REVIEW PEOPLE! THERE'S 800 OF YOU! REVIEW GODDAMN YOU!
*sigh* rant over :) now, sorry for getting your hopes up here, bet you thought this was a proper comment :P
LOL at your spelling/grammar in your AN :') Rose and Albus are in fourth year. NOT Rose and Albus is in forth year. Dr K would CRY if he read that :P but awesome chapter, I won't get your hopes up further by commenting on the next one but I WILL READ IT! :DAuthor's Response: jeez! u scared the fahita out of me with that first sentance! thanks anywho, and i don't concentrate on the grammer in the AN anyway. the spelling though, that is another story... :) Report Review
Nice update - I like the idea of Hermione being a bit of a role model and favourite of Roxanne's.
I had read this a couple of weeks ago and I apologise for not reviewing earlier but I'm glad you've updated. I'm desperately in love with Roxanne Weasley and finding fanfiction for her is nausiatingly difficult.
I quite like your spirited characterisation of her; I definitely feel she would be a bit .. almost obnoxious but in a perfectly gryffindor, weasley kind of way? And I like some of the relationships you've been developing for her, particularly between James and Rose. I like how blunt Rose is and just puts her in her place. Family definitely like to be up front.
Oh, totally got the awkward turtle thing, by the way. Definitely made me giggle. It's a thing here too.. being Australia.. so I'm wondering where else it might be a thing?
The idea of Fred having been kept a secret, for this long, is pretty interesting, considering he was a war hero and would've been rather well known, so I'm really interested in how they've kept it a secret from the next gen kids. An awesome twist! I really feel awful for George and his uhm, public melt down and I think its entirely realistic in the context of what he's been through.
Mm, all in all, I like where you're going with this :) I think you do need to watch out for grammatical and spelling - and I think there's a bit of tense changing too. Maybe look into getting someone to edit/beta for you? But your style is quite funny, and you've got potential! Keep it up :)Author's Response: thank you for your review! at last, a nice long one :) and thanks for liking it, glad that someones is! the grammer and spelling, I totally agree! I really am bad at that, and need desperate help! you mentioned the beta thing, I am really bad at all the technology thang, so i have no idea how to ask people, or who to ask :/ Report Review
It's great please continue!Author's Response: thanks for the review!
submitting the next chapter soon :) Report Review
:D Loved it :) twas brillig :PAuthor's Response: mr elmes, now mrs moyle? all the teachers love me!!! lol Report Review
Haha, they siad I'd never teach a llama to drive!
Oh. Uh, that wasn't what I meant to say :P
I mean, HAHA, I READ YOUR STORY, EVEN THOUGH YOU TOLD ME NOT TO!
Okay, I actually LOLed at your author's note - you spelt grammar wrong :P
But anyway, awesomeness, and I'm gonna keep reading :D AND THERE'S NOTHING YOU CAN DO TO STOP ME! MWA HAHAHAHAHAHAAuthor's Response: you may have all these jabs, my friend, but answer me this...
do you have a story up here?...what was that?...no?
there you go, take that! lol :P
by the way, love the user name :D rofl Report Review
adorable story so far!Author's Response: thank you! :D Report Review
Jesus Caitlindalada do you ever update?!Author's Response: i'm working on it :) Report Review
Hahahaha sj does romanceAuthor's Response: knock it off Ishani! ast least say something interesting! what do u think? any improvements to be made? Report Review
Hiya kitty:) oh yess you know who it is now but if you don't let me gove you a hint ... I'm BASHFUL:P now I know what ur thinking ... GOD aren't I annoying but honestly this comment is for reals! I actually read the new chapters and they are awesome:) see you at school. Love youu Author's Response: hi, thanks for the review, even though
a) you've already done one
b) you could have just told me in school
but thanks all the same :) Report Review
oh grangergirl197 (i know your real name tho... :D) whats occurin?
bambino, this is fab! however...GRAMMAR TIME!!!
1. Random change into third person
2. "after the speech of never ending"...what?! CONFUSED!!
3. "but why talk to Rose." question mark time!
heehee i do love being a nit-picker :) lol fab story tho, and i'll be waiting for the next chapter.Author's Response: hello my friend,
I have taken all your points into account, but if you don't mind, stop being a nit picker!
For all the reviewers, I know this person from school, and i would never talk to my readers so rudely.
Keep reviewing :D
hey caitlin i see you over there hahaha youre right next to me !! THATS RIGHT SUCKERS I KNOW THE AUTHOR:D Ilove this bloody amazing peice of work! you should be a writer! WHY DID YOU CHANGE TO THIRD PERSON IN THE MIDDLE YOU LITTLE IDIOT! HEHEHEHEHE i like annoying her, Albus you little git you cvould have given ROXY ARM CANCER!!! ANYWAYS BYEEE XXXAuthor's Response: thank you for that riviting report Sharney lol
u can scare me sometimes :D
but I love ya all the same :D Report Review
I like your story
but isn't lorcan lovegood suppose to be lorcan scamander
because Luna married Rolf scamander
I like the story's plot
good jobAuthor's Response: yes, I only realised that right after I submitted the story, but thank u for being true to the books, because I want to be :D And thank u for liking my story ;) i wasn't sure about it myself, but it is my first go :) Report Review
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