Hello Helena! BTW, you can't disapperate in the Hogwarts grounds!! :P

Author's Response: Disapparate. And the rules changed.

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This is really nice - the first founders story that I've read but I really like it! I only wished it was a bit longer :)

Author's Response: It's sort of hard to write much on the Founders era as not much is known about them, but I shall try and write a longer one at some point. :) Thanks for the review!

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It's cool. I like it(:
~LilyFire

Author's Response: Thank you :)
I just epically failed and nearly reported your review, sorry! xD
lunarocks14

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I love this! really well written :P x

Author's Response: Thank you :)

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It is an interesting concept, however it could have been written so much better. It seems that too many cliches have been used. The characters do not seem to have much depth, hardly any realistic emotions are explored. I would suggest rewriting this. Descriptions are always useful. Let the reader experience the story and not just read it. I hope I'm not to nasty or hard to understand!

Author's Response: Wow, that was an interesting response, but I guess I did say constructive criticism is welcome...

Thank you for your comments. That's really useful and I will bear that in mind. :) You're not at all hard to understand, honest.

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Thats pretty cool. How you used information you didn't really know to make a good story.

Love LuvIzMagic xoxo

P.S SHORT STACK ROCK!!!

Author's Response: Thank you. It was slightly hard writing as I didn't know much about any of the characters! :) Thanks again.

P.S xD

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I quite liked the pairings in this, however, maybe you should have mentioned that Rowena or Helga was a Seer and therefore prophesied about the Heir of Slytherin & HP. Also, I believe Helena should have had a greater role.
But overall, a good plotline and good characters.

Always,
Saffiecat

Author's Response: I think you are right there, actually. I will put that in when I re-write it... yes, I have been told to re-write the whole thing.

Actually, I do agree. Although it's kinda hard writing about Helena as she shares my name, and it feels weird.

Thanks for your review :)
lunarocks14

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that was great! I loved how even though it was short, it didn't seem incomplete. Really nice job at getting the characters' peronalities across in so little time, and on making it fit the time period. you could even think about continuing this into a story. awesome work!

Author's Response: Thank you! :) It just came into my head while up a mountain, so I wrote it down... France inspired me, weirdly.

Thanks for the review :)
lunarocks14

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