This is such a cute story! I love every moment of it. You portray Lily very well, I can just imagine her acting like she does in your one-shot. Also, I loved how she admires Severus. He's the only wizard she knows, so of course, she'll think that everything he does is amazing.
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I loved how you wrote Snape. The characterization was perfect! Same goes for Lily. And very well written. Couldn't find any mistakes. Just great writing all around! 10/10Author's Response: Thank you so very much for the lovely review! I'm so glad you enjoyed this one-shot. ^_^
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That was beautiful.
You portrayed Snape PERFECTLY. How he was so awkward I literally wanted to cringe, and yet he had this...this confidence in him whenever he was around Lily.
And Lily's innocence. Amazing.
This was wonderful, amazing.
You got everything spot-on.Author's Response: Thanks a million, Sara_Sj! It was just great hearing from you. I'm really thrilled that you liked this one-shot.
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This was so sweet and touching, Lee Anne! I'm used to reading such dramatic and powerful things from you, and this is drastically different, but amazing all the same. It's wonderful how you're able to capture just the right atmosphere for this story - affectionate, youthful, innocent. There's so much lightness in this story, even with Lily's frustration and Petunia's loud music - you've written this so gently. That's the best way I can describe it.
I love your characterizations of both Lily and Snape, but I'm actually most fascinated by Petunia and the way that she listens to that one song over and over again. It's such a strange song, though the lines you've included, when taken in the context of this story alone, suit it perfectly. Maybe it's just the adult Petunia's portrayal clouding my vision, but her listening to a drinking song just seems so odd - she really can't know what the words mean, but I wonder what she hears in the music that she likes - some sort of longing? something to drown out her sorrows?
I'll stop before I go reaching too far. It's a lovely story, definitely deserving of more attention, and it's been fantastic to find you stepping out of your comfort zone, especially with such great success. :DAuthor's Response: Hiya Susan!
Thank you so much for the lovely feedback! I'm always thrilled whenever I receive a review from you, especially on a story I'm so very unsure about. You hit the nail on the head when you said this fic was out of my comfort zone. Seriously, if my comfort zone is in the North Pole, this fic is in the South Pole. I was so, so nervous about this story. I never, ever write humor/fluff, because, well, I stink at those genres. Hehe.
Needless to say, I was ecstatic to hear that you thought this fic turned out all right. I thought it might be way too corny. Since I don't know how to write humor/fluff, I think I might have overcompensated by making the plot sappy. But then again, I suppose I did manage to sneak some angst in with the whole Lily/Sev pairing. ;)
And I'm so glad you liked my take on Petunia. She's another rather misunderstood HP character, I think. Usually, I never paid much mind to the Dursleys, but I was always struck by her relationship with Lily. It really is sad to see two sisters driven apart, especially when they clearly loved each. And I do agree with your assessment of her obsession with that particular opera song. I don't think Petunia understands a word of it, but the song itself is very uplifting and cheerful, full of pomp and loud chorals and a waltz-like beat. I think she definitely listens to it to cover up her own emotions, and, perhaps, because she knows it annoys Lily so much.
Again, thanks so much for reviewing, Susan! I really, really, really appreciate all of your comments. Your feedback never fails to encourage me. I do hope you have a great week. ^_^ Take care and be well!
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Hi there! So I remember reading this awhile back. Not sure why I didn't review. This is such a wonderful little one-shot!
First of all, I just wanted to say how much I enjoy reading all of your stories. They are all very well written. I always look forward to reading them, and this story is no exception. :) How you portray the relationship here between Lily and Petunia, I think, matches up to what we see of it in canon. The little addition of the opera music adds that little bit of humor that makes it even more enjoyable than it already is. I can't say whether I like Lily/Severus, but I do like reading about sweet romantic scenes like you included in this one. It made me smile.
So lovely one-shot. I'm glad I had the chance to read it. ^_^
~KristenAuthor's Response: Hello Kristen!
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review! I'm so very glad you enjoyed this one-shot. To be honest, I never, ever write fluffy romantic pieces, so this story was indeed a challenge. I don't know, for some reason I have difficulty pulling off romance. Usually, I think my stories turn out rather corny, to be honest. ;)
Also, I was so happy to hear that you liked my take on Lily and Petunia's relationship. Despite it all, I think they really must have loved each other. After all, JKR seems to suggest that they were rather close before Lily went to Hogwarts and Petunia must have felt some sorrow when her sister was murdered.
Again, thanks so much for reviewing! It was wonderful hearing from you. I hope you have a pleasant week. ^_^ Take care and be well!
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Normally, I don't champion for these two, at all, as I really simply cannot stand Severus/Lily. However, as I've read others of your works and loved them, I decided to read this one, too.
I have to tell you, that I was not disappointed!
Generally, I feel like Lily/Sev is a bit too forced as if the author is bashing you over the head repeatedly to get you to notice that they absolutely adore this pairing. I didn't get that sort of feel from this piece, at all.
The characterizations of this piece were brilliant. Especially Severus and Lily. I adored this tidbit: Lily knew she should have gone straight into the house to tell her sister how sorry she was for running off. Because she was sorry. And she realized now, after Sev had gone, that she would never have used that silly charm to silence her sisterís music. Because it seemed to ring so true to canon from what we know of both Severus and Lily.
I think you got into their heads perfectly for this little piece. :D
It's a little ironic that Severus doesn't like opera music, though. I can sort-of picture him as the Phantom in my head. ;) But that's after years of roleplaying and picking apart his head, so don't mind me.
The flow and description were absolutely fabulous! I adored how easily it all fit into place, and none of it seemed to clash in imagery or style.
Also, this time I didn't find any glaringly obvious typos so that made it all the more smoother a read.
LindersAuthor's Response: Hi Linders!
Thank you so much for the lovely review! You've been spoiling me terribly lately with such thoughtful feedback. I truly am appreciative of your kind comments, especially concerning a pairing you don't like and one I myself am not entirely familiar with.
I've always liked the idea of Lily/Snape within the context of JKR's canon. There's something about unrequited love that's so exquisitely tragic. However, I've never really read any Lily/Snape fanfics before, so my judgment may not be the best. ;)
I'm so glad you enjoyed my take on both Lily and Severus. The thing that always stuck in my mind about Lily was her reputation for kindness. Somehow, I can't picture her as being a nasty brat. ^_^
Haha, maybe Snape grew to like opera as an adult. As you mentioned, I do think it would suit his temperament somewhat.
Again, thanks so much for the great review, Linders! It was just wonderful hearing from you. I hope you have a pleasant weekend! Take care and be well!
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