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Review #1, by ImagineHarmony Twice A Day

15th July 2013:
Hi!

The tone and the air weight feeling of this is amazing! I think you really connected to his thoughts and paired it up with amazing description with that suspense in mind. I think its him dreaming, dreaming that he is visiting twice a day. The walk he walks is so beautiful and ethereal. I felt like I was really there!

So really great job on writing this! The structure and plot and every thing else is just really amazing :)

Author's Response: Hi!
Thank you! You're too kind -blushes-
Thanks for the lovely review :)


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Review #2, by slytherinchica08 Twice A Day

17th January 2013:
Wow this is so beautiful! I've never read a story that has this sentence structure before but I found it to be beautiful here! It really added this whole new layer to your story that has really made it stand out in my mind. I loved the description and word usage for this oneshot as well. It all really added to the scene and the ending was just perfect! I love how in the beginning I really wasn't sure where I was at or what was going on but as I continued reading, things began to fall in place and I began to understand what was going on. This was very well written and very unique! Great Job!

~Slytherinchica08~

Author's Response: I am so sorry it's taken me so long to reply! I only just noticed this review. Thank you so much! I took inspiration from a poet I happened to be studying at the time, who uses quite unusual sentence structure that I thought was really pretty. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for taking the time to review :)

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Review #3, by Maitri Harys Twice A Day

7th October 2010:
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Beautiful...
Lyrical...
Sad...
Sirius?

Author's Response: Haha, thank you so much *hugs*
(and sorry for the long wait, I replied to this before but I only just noticed it didn't go through)


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Review #4, by s_amy2014 Twice A Day

11th September 2010:
I really enjoyed this. The writing style is great. Seems very old-fashioned. Although it was only 500 words, it was still very powerful.

"Their bravery through his cloak does not permeate. Like ants he brushes them aside, in flashes green."

This would have to be my favorite line. I'm unsure if I've correctly interpreted it, but it seems like a metaphore comparing his unbreaking bravery with the killing curse.

Very nice, I enjoyed it :)

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked the writing style, it was an experiment - I wanted to try something a bit different. That line was more describing Voldemort's murder of Lily and James and their incredibly bravery, however it does work rather interestingly as a metaphor too, now that you've mentioned it.
Thanks so much for taking the time to leave such a lovely review, I'm happy you enjoyed it :)


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Review #5, by Violet Gryfindor Twice A Day

9th September 2010:
That was great, very moving at the end when you realize exactly what he's come to see, who he's visiting. What I liked best was the language - there was an old-fashioned feel to your sentence structure and style that make this unique and more interesting to read, more of a challenge. The description of the overgrown flowers being just like James's hair was fantastically creative - it's like the graveyard is taking on the Potter's characteristics.

Very well done! :)

Author's Response: I'm so glad you enjoyed it! The writing style was rather experimental, so I'm thrilled it worked out. It was largely inspired by Gerard Manley Hopkins, a poet I'm studying at the moment who uses odd word orders, I had the sudden inspiration to try doing something different with sentence structures. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, I'm happy you enjoyed it :)

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