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Review #1, by Chazzie Old Brown Shoe

13th October 2014:
Hi there!
I adore this story, and I'm so impressed that you have managed to write a story to 'I am the Walrus' . I honestly wouldn't have thought it possible until I read this. You have done such an amazing job with the characterisation of the Rolf, in particular. He likes what he knows and isn't used to or good at lying, and yet since arriving in India he has begun to come out of his shell a bit more. You've captured Luna perfectly - odd, but not mad. I loved when she was talking to the guard about wands and identification, it was really funny, and your description of her sari and top was really vivid. Hmm. Is Kanwal actually Stubby Boardman? Or is he hiding something else? Just his wife staring pointedly at him, and various parts seem to suggest it...
I adore your authors notes, they are very entertaing to read. Can't wait to see what happens next!

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Review #2, by maraudertimes Coming to Take You Away

28th September 2014:
Hiya! Gryffie September Review Swap!

This was really cool! I love how you used The Beatles, Elvis Presley, and Stubby Boardman together. It really fit perfectly and I loved how you incorporated the song lyrics.

It was really cool to see Rolf in this light. I've read so many portrayals of him but never like this. I love how you brought canon characters into it as well, like the Hobgoblins and Stubby Boardman, and you fit them in really well. Luna was also a riot and I loved her little quips. I'm with Rolf on this one: I would love to just watch people have to deal with her.

The whole Rolf/Luna dynamic is also really cute. Absolutely adorable! They really do love each other! One of my favourite canon couples and you really did them justice.

The Indian couple, Kanwal and Shruthi, are really cute, and it's so nice to have a muggle in a story! I love muggles, I really do. And Kanwal is perfect, even if it is a little bit suspicious that he's so willing to drop everything and help them. Does he not have a job?

Anyways, this was a really cool idea and you executed it really well. Your characters are well developed and their dialogue is really fun to read along to. This was really fun!

Lo :)

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Review #3, by pointless_proclamations The Fool On the Hill

13th September 2014:

I find your MC commentary/author notes very charming.

Also, as a fan of Indian mythology, the mention of garduas had me grinning maniacally. The amount of research I imagine you (concerning more than just mythology, geography and culture too) do is astounding!

Your writing is. . . attractive, if you'll accept that term. It's captivating. I am not only impressed by the premise of the story, but by the execution as well! Your story is amazing in every aspect. It's amazing fun to follow, it's intriguing, it raises so many questions of the 'what is going to happen' kind. Indeed, it is a strange story, but you seem to thrive in all its uniqueness.

Cheers. :D

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Review #4, by pointless_proclamations Coming to Take You Away

7th September 2014:

What a marvellously captivating story you have here and such an interesting premise at that!

Your style of writing only adds to the charm of the story. I love the way you've written all your character here. Luna is written so well. And the dynamic between Luna and Rolf is both amusing and endearing. You make them work so well together and I am in awe. I am further impressed by your knowledge of the culture. Have you been to India before? Your descriptions are so vivid and alluring. I felt like I was actually there with them.

I'm glad our little chat led me to this wonderful story. :D


Author's Response: Thank you! Writing Luna is daunting enough, let alone trying to imagine what her significant other would be like. I get very nervous about my portrayal of them. It is a huge compliment, and gives me a great sense of relief to hear that you like the way they are done.

I have never been to India, though the farther I get with this story, the more I want to go. Again, it's a huge relief to me to hear that you think it is done well. I am in awe of how rich, and diverse, and old Indian culture is, and I very much want to do it justice. I have done a lot of reading about it. Travel blogs, and videos have helped especially. Also, the secret to a lot of my description is Google images. ;) I search until I find a street scene, or landscape that resembles what's in my head and use that to base description off of.

Thanks again for this, and please don't forget to send me a link to your story! I am intrigued by the Diwali.

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Review #5, by Ribbons Coming to Take You Away

14th August 2014:
You magnificent human being. Browsing the reviewing section of the forums, someone recommended this fan fiction to be reviewed, saying that it was one of the best and most original stories they'd ever read. Immediately my interested was aroused.

I'm warning you now, I will be quoting during this review, which I promise will be the length of the Order of the Phoenix, at minimum (6000 characters max? Challenge accepted).

This story is a feast of detail. When reading this, I could imagine everything, down to the smell of that gallivanting cow and the feeling of the dust billowing up in the streets. It wasn't just the environment though, the characters were painted so perfectly, I felt like they were sitting right next to me.

It's so could be cannon. CANNON.

So, your details are superb. Check. But is there more? Yes there is. Another double order of excellence in writing coming right up!

Think Harry Potter for a second. The good, old fashioned series of seven books that changed a lot of lives and inspired lots of people, blah, blah, blah (I promise I don't usually have so much disrespect for those geek bibles, but at the moment there are more important things to worry about). In those books there is no wizarding India mentioned, let alone explored. Most authors would realize that and be like 'no way, man! I'm not going over there, scary imagination and thought is required to make to the other side alive'. Then they run away screaming, only to cower in throwaway rom coms and fluff bonanzas.

Did that make any sense? Probably not.

My point is, you didn't do that. With a determined expression, some camouflage pants, war paint and a large machete you tramped into that heart 'o darkness and made something AMAZING! I commend you for this, because it's not something everyone can do, or pull off.

Why? Because you had to make a whole new world (wizarding India dude!) and plop in characters that aren't super well known and are hard to write, one of which is never actually in the books at all (Rolph). Plus, your plot is so original - Stubby Boardman anyone? - that it just blows me away. You must have spent a lot of time on that one, because it's beautiful.

As I ponder, scratch my head, rub my chin and contemplate the answer to the ultimate question of life, the universe and everything (42), I realized another incredible thing about your incredible fan fiction: it's a mystery. No seriously, it is a mystery story.

Hello! That's amazing! I'm amazed! Not only have you wrangled all the things I mentioned above into a gorgeous, artful little line, you've actually plotted it with a MYSTERY!

Oh Renegade Niffler, you deserve a medal for most original, intelligent, stylish, professional story on this site.

Two last things.

1 - I don't think I'm going to be able to make this 6000 characters. I'm sorry. No quotes either. What can you do?

2 - The fact that this has only got 8 reviews stuns me, amazes me and makes me wish I could just possess 10, 000 people to just read and review this gem.


Author's Response: Thank you so much for writing this review! I apologize that it has taken me this long to notice it was here. After a particularly long, stressful day at work this really made me happy.

I'm thrilled that you liked my take on wizarding India. I admit, it took quite a lot of work to put it together. Never having been there, I spent a good deal of time reading about geography and culture. I also took a bit of a cue from JK, and did some reading on Indian magical mythology and folklore, at least where the creatures are concerned, and tried to weave that in. Using the magical setting was actually kind of liberating. I confess I hoped it would help me avoid showing my lack of thorough understanding of Indian Muggle life (again, never having been there and all).

One of the best things about your review is that it has really helped my motivation. I actually picked this story back up recently with the intention of finally finishing it. Knowing that there is someone out there who still might like to read it has me more determined than ever. :)

I am also totally blown away that this story was recommended. So cool.

Thanks again for adding a bit of joy to my stress and exhaustion. I should also note, in the process of editing/finishing the story I'll probably end up deleting the last 2 chapters and posting them afresh. Just in case you swing by and wonder where they've gone. ;)

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Review #6, by TallestTower Coming to Take You Away

20th December 2010:
I loved this! It actually pains me to see it only has four chapter reviews. This is one of the most original and quirky pieces of fanfiction I have read in a while! I love stories like this, which are based on canon characters and it has always amazed me at the ideas that people come up with!

I adore your writing style. Your attention to detail is impeccable. I think you have a real gift, your comedic timing is brilliant! Those tiny details make the story excellent. I always get a bit star-struck almost with stories I really love and never know how to phrase what I'm trying to say! ;)

Your description of scenery was lovely, I could see the places vividly in my mind- and yet it felt natural, if you know what I mean? Not forced. The way you introduced the story with the description of the park was brilliant, and seeing Dehli through Rolf's eyes was incredible (I sound so fake right now... sorry! I'm being sincere, promise!)

This comes across as so well-thought out. What you've done with the wizarding world seems extremely canon, as if it were straight out of HP.

It's the little things that really stuck out for me. The muggles who couldn't get to the portkey place, and the way Rolf caught sight of a mother dashing away just before he left. I'm so glad you put details like that in! The awkward half-handshake between Luna and Kanwal. It gives the story a really light feel and makes it seem so much more three dimensional.

I loved your characterization of Luna! She wasn't overly dreamy, which is a trap I would fall into, or eccentric - she was calm, honest and approached things with that child-like acceptance Luna always had in the books. Her dialogue was spot on! I loved her interactions with Rolf. It's clear that Rolf was really fond of her, while still appreciating her eccentricities (umm... probably didn't spell that word right... or invented it... oops). The dirigable plums line was lovely :D

And I lurved Rolf's characterization. His emotion was so real! I really believed in his nerves, again those little details like wiping his palm on his trousers. I liked his inner-conflict. He felt so real and so likeable and so-gah, can I just marry him? ;) His dialogue was perfect and I loved his little passionate speech about the might Stubster.

Did I mention how crazy I am for this plot idea too? It's so refreshing! It's a very original idea and whilst this chapter wasn't serious, you haven't created something that's 100% silly - I feel like it's already got depth and suspense. The whole shifty Kanwal business really builds suspense and adds drama to this first chapter :)

Grammar was perfecto, give your team of betas a pat on the back eh? Haha.

Man, I love this song and you have done it justice.

Overall- a brilliant story introduction! I'm already in love with the characters, hooked on the plot and ready to read more...

Really really enjoyed your writing style - 10/10!


Author's Response: Hey um, I'm not sure if you're around anymore or not, but it truly pains me that I never responded to this, so I'm just going to do it.

This is absolutely one of the best reviews I could ever have imagined, and it is was actually one of the things that made me want to pick this story back up and finish it. I can't tell you what it means to me that you liked this so much, and noticed all the little details I put into it. (Now it's my turn to feel like I sound fake).

I am also relieved, and so pleased that you think Luna came off well. She's one of my favorite characters, and so hard to get right. It's really nerve wracking even attempting her.

I'm not sure what else to say besides, thank you, thank you, thank you for writing this!

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Review #7, by maskedmuggle The Fool On the Hill

15th December 2010:
Well, this was certainly another interesting chapter!
That's the first thing I thought of as I finished.

The second was, that was awfully long. I'm a bit mixed up about the length. On the one hand, I could read more, and the intermission was great, but it felt like it was dragging a bit. On the other hand, a lot happened in this story, and some parts of it might have had more impact if it was split into two. Nevertheless, I got through it, and I did enjoy reading it.

Your story and the way they connect to the lyrics really is clever. Your story seems so very well planned, with all the Indian things mentioned.. the places mentioned that are Indian-sounding… are they real places?

I thought in this part here, "Suddenly she grabbed his arm, yanked him into the noisy pub and dragged him straight to the back. She flung open the door of the men's toilet, and they tumbled inside… Luna's kisses smoldering down his neck." Luna sounded VERY out of character, but she is an adult, so she might have changed. It still feels a little out of character. Maybe Rolf was the one who, "grabbed her arm", "yanked her in", "dragged her", "flung open the door", etc? By the way, the words you've chosen really show the intense emotion. Grabbed, yanked, dragged, flung… really powerful words.

Overall, it was an enjoyable, interesting, original, very well written and detailed fic, where the unexpected keeps happening. I'm really curious to find out who those men are, and what/if Kanwal is hiding anything! And what's going to happen the very next day - so please update soon! :)

Author's Response: Hi. I'll be honest here that I'm trying to dig myself out of a hole of shame for all these unanswered reviews, and I hope you'll forgive my extreme delay.

That being said, thank you for this!

Yeah, I was actually pretty concerned about chapter length, but for the first two chapters just wasn't really sure where to split them. I may just have to hope that folks can enjoy them in spite of that. As I am editing and reposting this story though, I did address the length issue in future chapters. Your feedback really helped. :)

Some of the Indian things are real. For example, the Bundelkhand is an actual geographic region, and Jhansi is a real city. I included translations for the things I made up in the author's notes. As painstaking a process as this has been, it's actually been pretty fun learning a bit more about Indian geography.

As to your comment about Luna and the OOCishness: Originally I was playing off of how open and casual she is about things that other people treat as touchy--like when she was talking to Harry about the death of her mother--and that's what I was going for. However, your comment got me thinking about it, and I realized that that was not what I achieved at all. Your comment was spot on, and I have a hunch that you aren't the only person who would read it that way. I took your advice, and hope that the soon to be submitted edited version is better. :)

So, in short, thanks again for this review. It really helped me. :)

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Review #8, by maskedmuggle Coming to Take You Away

12th December 2010:
What an interesting story!
I really enjoyed reading this, it's so different from everything I usually read!
Frankly, this is my first Luna/Rolf, and I loved it!
Your plot is so original! I love how you used the portkeys, and Delhi as the setting - I can definitely see this whole story happening!
I think this would even be good if you added more chapters, so update please! ;) I'd love to know where Stubby is and whether (or what) Kanwal is hiding anything!
I don't know if it was just me, but I honestly didn't see the point in the lyrics in the songfic. I didn't really get the whole walrus thing, but as I said, maybe that's just me!
Your writing is completely brilliant though!

I was entertained reading this, so thank you!

Author's Response: Thank you! :)

Yeah, the Walrus thing... I'm not sure how much to say about that, as I don't want to give anything away. I hope it's somewhat more clear what that's alluding to by the end of the story. It's Beatles related. I'm thinking I might explain it fully in an author's note on the last chapter.

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Review #9, by peppersweet Coming to Take You Away

17th September 2010:
Namaste, Niffles! Ahoythere here with your extremely overdue review - my most humble of humble apologies, but I've been bogged down with a load of composition homework this past fortnight and this is the first real spare moment I've had to review.

I know that seeing as I'm supposed to be all fair and unbiased seeing as I'm running this challenge, I shouldn't probably be fangirling over this story, but I LOVE IT. Seriously, there is nothing I can fault with this chapter. It's simply awesome. The descriptions of India are superb - I've never been, but your writing was wonderfully evocative (wow, that sounds so dull when I say it) of Delhi, and now I really, REALLY want to go there, even though being from Scotland I'd probably die from the heat.

Rolf is an awesome character - he's so nerdy! Ahha, wearing a corporate shirt (like in the song!) and being absolutely head-over-heels in love with Stubby Boardman (don't deny it, he is). For reasons I can't quite explain, I picture him with a mullet. Luna likes guys with mullets, right? Right? (Wrong is the answer here, I feel.)

'The only drawback was a gentleman in their vicinity whom Rolf hoped, for everyone's sake, was going home to have a bath.' - oh, how I laughed. I also loved that you didn't beat around the bush with the descriptions of the cold in the first paragraph. It was just nose-drippingly cold. I know the feeling.

Even your author's note was funny, especially when you thanked all those 'OMG McCartney is DEAAAD!' conspiracy theorists.

The nub and gist of this review is that I kind of love this story already. Why must you rule at songfics? Can I just schneak in and steal some of your songfic-writing talent? Guessing it's a no, but, still, I like to think that by reading your songfics I can absorb some of that talent by osmosis, or something. (Assorted biologists: 'Stupid ahoythere! Osmosis involves the transportation of water across a selectively permeable membrane! Did you not LISTEN in biology?' ahoythere: 'Hmmm, no, too busy reading fanfic.')

I digress.

Onto the serious bit: I hope to have a blog entry up this weekend about the winners of the challenge and stuff, so watch this space. Or, rather, watch the space on the forums, because watching this space in particular won't be much good. Thanks for entering the challenge - I really hope you enjoyed it, and I might just have to build you a massive shriney shrine of shrineness for managing to make a songfic out of 'I am the Walrus'.

Goo goo g'joob! ;D

Author's Response: Well, if your review was late, it was certainly nothing to the lateness of my reply. I can only offer a sincere apology, though it seems a meager gesture at this point.

I was truly thrilled that you liked this story! It was a bit nerve wracking to write. I wasn't sure if readers would like it or think I was completely mad, or both (not that that would be a bad thing).

Yeah, Rolf is pretty crazy pants for Stubby. :p I have always imagined Rolf as being a bit odd, but in a different way than Luna, like a weirdness that compliments her, and that's what I was going for with him. I think I like him too much to see him with a mullet though. :D I'm not sure if Luna would go for that, or just be painfully honest about thinking it an awful haircut.

I feel like I sound weird and insincere in responses, but I am truly flattered that you liked it so well. Thank you!

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Review #10, by LovlyRita Coming to Take You Away

7th September 2010:
Congratulations, you have just accomplished something that few people have ever accomplished. A) you made me slow down in the queue and actually READ while I was validating and B) You made me log out of my staff account and onto my actual account to review.

This, this was magnificent! It was so well written, and I could actually imagine myself there. And a fic set in India! So very authentic. There are some things that I loved about this. The first thing was Luna and Rolf and the way they ended up in India, going through customs and all. Luna was so beautifully done! I have never actually read a story featuring Luna and Rolf, so this was quite exciting.

And to go to India to look for Stubby Boardman! I just love it. How funny is that? This plot is original and well thought out, and I really think you have a gem here that is 100% unique.

And to the reason that I clicked on the story in the first place to validate it- the title. The Beatles song. I LOVE the Beatles, and my first thought on EARTH did someone take I am the Walrus and turn it into a plausible, well thought out songfic? And somehow, you DID IT! And it was amazing. Ahhh Lennon/McCartney

Author's Response: LovlyRita, When I posted this I was secretly hoping you would notice my shameless advertising on the forums and check it out (who better to appreciate a Beatles story than "LovlyRita"? ;) ), but I never imagined you would be the one to validate it, let alone immediately review it! I am truly stunned and honored by this review, and feel I can't thank you enough.

I'm so glad you thought that the Indianess was authentic. I have spent SO much time researching India, on top of planning out how the Indian Wizarding world would be different from England. I am very relieved that my hard work has paid off. Plus your comments about Luna made my day. She's such a tricky character to write, and one of my favorites, I really wanted to do her justice.

And YES! the Beatles time in India was a huge part of the inspiration behind this. I was so worried that no one would pick up on that, so you can imagine my delight that the first person who reviewed got it! When I signed up for the challenge and was assigned this song with Luna/Rolf as the pairing, the idea came to me like a lightning bolt. I don't think I could have come up with anything for this song with a different pairing. Since a lot of the lyrics don't really tie into the plot as a whole, just random details in the narrative (Mainly it's just the chorus that really reflects the plot), I wanted to add strength to the piece by drawing in other forms of Beatles inspiration. Choosing India as the setting just seemed extra perfect as the Beatles were there right around the time they recorded Magical Mystery Tour.

Okay, this response is threatening to become longer than the review so I should finish up. I am absolutely thrilled that you liked it so much, and if it ends up on story seekers, that would absolutely make my HPFF life. Honestly. :) I'm honored that you would even consider it. Thank you so much. :)

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