Wow - amazing story! And a very original concept as well. I have never been a huge fan of Snape/Lily but stories like this make me want to believe in it. Would love to read more like this from you!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the great review, academica! It was just wonderful hearing from you. I really do appreciate your kind comments and I'm so glad you enjoyed this one-shot. ^_^ Take care and be well!

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I love Snape/Lily. I thought this was good. ^_^ Great one-shot!

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This was...different. And that's what I admire about it. It was beautifully written and the journey into Snape's mind was definitely a change. I like the fact it was set at Tobias's funeral.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review, GinnyWeasley_13! It was wonderful hearing from you.

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Hi this is darklingslytherin from the forums.

I don't know what you mean by over the top at all! I think this story is absolutely perfect just the way that it is because this is exactly how I imagine Snape's inner voice would be like while seeing Lily. It is so full of angst and sadness and unreturned love, exactly how Snape's life was. It is heart-wrenching.

It's wonderful, I would love to see a story from you that is totally Snape/Lily centric. I think you could pull it off really well.

I love how you described everything. It wasn't too over the top which was totally nice. Over describing is a bit of a pet peeve of mine.

Keep writing, you build a fantastic scene!

Author's Response: Hi darlingslytherin!
*blushes* Thank you so much for the thoughtful review! You are really too kind. I'm certain I don't deserve such praise. :)

This is actually my first Lily/Snape story. I do like the pairing very much, but, to be honest, I thought my take on it was a bit too maudlin. I suppose I've been reading too much of the Romantics lately, lol.

Needless to say, I'm so glad you thought this story wasn't too over-the-top. Another reviewer pointed out that the pairing itself is rather over-the-top, which does seem to be the case. ^_^

Again, thank you so much for taking the time to read and review! It was really wonderful hearing from you. Take care and be well!

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Oh wow, Lee Anne, this is a fantastic Snape/Lily story. You say over-the-top, but that's the ship - it's so dripping with angst and unrequited love that it makes every story about it feel overdone. But I don't think that yours is over-the-top. It's heartfelt and filled with mourning, but it never crosses the line with the angst and drama. It's just enough.

I love the whole situation you've created for the two characters. It's unexpected, and that's what makes it so unique and fresh for a Snape/Lily story. To think that he was able to see her that one last time and they were able to have "a moment" together makes this almost a happy story. Snape finds that heaven at the end, and that's what makes this a different kind of story.

There were a couple of lines in which you oddly chopped up the sentence. I'm probably guilty of this too, but all the same... *looks innocent* They are usually sentences (not paragraphs) beginning with "But". You may want to look those over.

Anyway, this is a great addition to the best Snape/Lily stories on the archive, though I shouldn't be surprised, seeing that you wrote it. ;)

Author's Response: Hi Susan!
Haha, yes, I suppose Snape/Lily is a rather over-the-top ship and that's probably why I have a secret love for it. I don't know, I'm a sucker for unrequited love, it's so painful...yet poetic. Like something out of Keats.

Agh! Sorry for rambling. As always, you've left me a little incoherent with your fabulous review. Thank you! I felt really lukewarm about this story. Even though I like the pairing, I wasn't sure how it would turn out. And the ending was clunky. I just couldn't get it to work right.

Thanks so much for letting me know about the awkward sentences! I was trying to go for a choppier style, but maybe I should stick to legato instead of staccato? ;) Either way, I'll wait a few days and then go over this with a clearer mind. I don't know about you, but I can never revise a story right after I post it. My brain seems trained to miss all the typos, hehe.

Again, thanks so much for everything, Susan! I truly cherish your feedback. Take care and be well!

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Lee Anne

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