aww poor rose i hope she wins scorp over

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Oh! Sweet! I love Albus! He's always depicted as the nice loving one... I wish I had a older brother/cousin like that. But I just had to be stuck with somone like Draco Malfoy!

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Oh! Oh! Oh! Fantastic! Keep it up!

Author's Response: thanks! :)

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I don't think he'll say he likes Rose, which will be sad. Good first chapter. Update soon!

Author's Response: can't give anything away ;) butthank you! :)

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more please! :) :) this is a really good beginning !

Author's Response: the next chapter is just waiting to be validated :D
should be up soon.
and thank you!

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I have a horrible feeling that he's going to say Dom :( but cool story so far

Author's Response: you'll have to wait and see haha ;)
thank you!

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If he says Dom, I will be so upset. I am a Rose/Scorpius shipper all the way! I hate Dom and Scorpius. Ah well. :D I'll have to wait and see.

This is a good start but there is always room for improvement. For example you might want to try and find a beta because there are some noticeable grammar/spelling errors but they are far from the worst I've seen.

Something else you may want to consider is trying to lighten up on your descriptions. Yes, they let me see everything you pictured in this scene but unfortunately left no room for imagination.

Dialogue is another thing. Maybe trying to add a bit more dialogue within the description would help to keep the flow of the story.

Other than those few things, this story is interesting. I like what you have started with Rose. That's the great thing about Next Gen is that you can really make the characters your own.

Good luck with your story, I'll definitley be following :D

Author's Response: Thanks so much! :D And thanks for the tips too :)
And I love Rose/Scorpius too but you'll have to wait and see what happens ;)

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