Haha this story got me laughing right off the bat. Keep updating please!Author's Response: haha thanks:) i'll try to get a new chapter out in a week or two...maybe. thanks for the review:)) Report Review
brilliant ! i love it, please keep writing it!Author's Response: thanks so much! :) Report Review
LMFAO, I love Albus and James, they make me like piss my pants. This story is totally hilarious because it can be awkward, but like actually hilarious. I must say it is probably one of the better stories I have read. Keep posting!Author's Response: hahah thanks so much! this totally just made my day:) i love al and james too. they are too funny. wow, that sounded really lame since i wrote the story. whateverr. and yeah, it is pretty awkward. haha, but hey, what can you do?
thanks for the amazing review:) you are too nice! Report Review
Hiya, I thought that because you left such a nice review on my story I better return the favour! I love this first chapter! It does not stink and is probably one of the best first chapter an Author has ever I have ever read! Well done!
I like the way you have chosen titles from Journey songs, I havent seen it before but that doesnt mean its a bad thing! It gives originality and I think its a very nice touch.
Just a little thing, sometimes you use the same word too much in a sentence (like the word wow) though it was only once or twice. Also you should write more description to balance it out with the dialog. Apart from that I love this story and all the detailing of characters and Jordan's pov.
Awesome chapter, keep up the good work,
Emma xAuthor's Response: hahah thank you! :) that's so nice.
I don't like the way I chose Journey songs as my titles...but I was having a brain fart on the day I decided to post this I guess and didn't know what to title my chapters/story. whatever.
and its actually hilarious to re-read this story, especially the early chapters...they make me cringe. hehe, I really don't like them...but I never want to go back and edit them either.
thanks again for the review! :) Report Review
so i thought that i'd already reviewed this chapter...but i guess not because it's letting me do this now. hmm. anyways, you already know what i think about this chappie...I LOVED IT. woot woot.
did you know that joe moses has his own one man show thing in nyc? i was like WHOA. one man show? that's pretty freaking awesome. i want to gooo. see me some joe moses, ya know?
i think i'm going to watch mulan because i really have a craving for watching mulan. i want me some ping...wait what's the main guys name? the hot one? chang? it's not ping? who's ping? i'm so confused right now.
did you move yet btw? you're moving near eleni right? that's awesome. make sure you get some redbull in your new house. you can never have too much redbull 80
you know what you also can't have enough of? LOGAN LERMAN. popopopopologanlerman. also conbrochill is something that you can't have enough of so he would have sufficed as an answer also.
i'm really just kind of rambling at this point trying to procrastinate from writing enemies with benefits. which brings me to ask: WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO UPDATE MISSY?! i miss jordan! also, are you going to write a new story? i feel like i read somewhere on here that you are...please do! i want some stuff to read!
:DAuthor's Response: haha, you are such a spaz. seriously.
alright, here we go.
yes, I heard about the one man show:) his name is shang? total hottie. yes, I moved already. yes, its near eleni's house. yes, I've already had some redbull in the new house...no joke. YOU CAN NEVER HAVE ENOUGH CON BRO! and I'm not going to update for a while, if ever. yes, I started a new story. I'm quite proud of it so far...its a james/oc. james is such a babe. haha just kidding...but no, he really is.
and you better update enemies with benefits soon! I'm lovin' that story:)
p.s. I think I'm gonna try and have another hp bday party which of course you would be invited to...but I'm not sure yet. ill fb the deets. Report Review
I really enjoyed this chapter! You have an effortless humour that just comes across in the narrators thoughts and actions. I was cracking up at certain parts so thanks for that (: McGonagall evil laugh! Haha! You are a good writer and I hope you update soon.
- SexyDoorFramesAuthor's Response: aw thanks! I haven't even worked on this story for months though! hopefully after finals are done I can get back into it! thanks again for the review:) Report Review
i love the whole Jordan/Al relationship, its like totally realistic and could actually happen. i love the Rose and Scorp bits, and James and Freddie! that made me laugh!
i like it so far :)Author's Response: ah thank you so much for the review! I thought I had already responded to it, but it turns out I didn't. -__- lovely. anyways, I'll try to update soon...but no promises since finals are coming up soon AND I'm starting a new story. CRAZINESS. :P thanks again for the review! :D Report Review
Very funny!! Loved it XDAuthor's Response: thank you! I'll try to update soon! :) Report Review
HELLO! So, I was looking through the reviews I posted and I noticed I only commented on three of your chapters. Well, seeing as this has been updated a few times since then, I decided to check out your story and do some catch up. This is when I realised that I DIDN'T COMMENT ON THIS CHAPTER! Although, I'm sure I read it already. Anyways, no I have not forgotten about you or ditched you or whatever. It's just me, drowning in homework and spending too much time watching Criminal Minds.
Enough of my rambling. So, awesome chapter. I lurves it. Post more though, because the waiting is making me sad.
P.S Nice picture of Gaspard/James. Man, what a babe.Author's Response: ahh! HI! :) so thank you for leaving a review! it reminded me to review your story! I keep forgetting! sorry:P and I totally understand about the homework and being addicted to tv shows. story of my life. and I'll try:P I'm starting a new story though, so I haven't written this recently at all. :(
and oh my gosh. I know. he is basically the definition of sexy. Report Review
FUNNY :) KEEP WRITING, I'LL KEEP READING!! :DAuthor's Response: thanks:) I am pretty funny. ha, just kidding. thanks for the review! :D Report Review
I want next chapter now ! :D:D:D:DAuthor's Response: ahh! I'm trying to finish it as soon as I can! :) thanks for the review! Report Review
I love the story sooo far and i would definatley agree logan lerma is especially amazing...i fantasize about him an awful lot.it's funny that in most fanfics the pictures of Al have been logan lerman hee hee isn't he just gawjuss...but yeah really good story keep writing xXxAuthor's Response: hahah everyone uses him as al because he's perfect! I mean, like, he is pretty much exactly who I picture when I imagine al. let's be honest. :P HE IS SO GORGEOUS. hahah:) thanks for the review! I'll try to update soon :D Report Review
wow, well, I'm glad jordan didn't see him getting harrassed by the creepy girl. she'd have a heart attack. I would have thought al sound cooler though the way jordan thinks of him so i was surprised when he started thinking the same way. might be good to maybe have a slight difference there so it doesn't seem like the same tone of the story. really enjoying the story though :)Author's Response: hahah I know! I totally think they sound the same! its really frustrating for me to try to write al's pov because:
1.I'm not a guy.
2. I don't want to mess it up
3. I had gotten writers block for chapter 4, so I just tried going into al's pov, but I hadn't really planned anything out.
soo that's a great combination of things that adds up to a few all-nighters, a couple bruises on my forehead from slamming it into my desk so many times, and a worn down delete button on my keyboard. yeah, I'm so cool, right? :P erm, yeah. thanks for the review! :)) Report Review
Mwahahaah! Uhhh…no just kidding. That was definitely not evil laughter…. Right. Now that that’s settled…
lololol loved that part!
Oh, I also need to say that I absolutely love breakfast, it's my favorite meal of the day :) I can't go a day without breakfast lol. great chapter, I always get a good laugh. Oh, and if you see my other post back to your review on my story, me and my friend worked stuff out, but I think you helped getting me in a better mood with your review, so thanks! On to the next chapter!Author's Response: hahah thanks:) I don't even know where some of the funny parts in my story comes from. like, I consider myself a funny person, but I don't think I would ever say something that that. I guess I'm just awesome. kidding.
and I actually don't like breakfast! how weird is that?! I LOVE breakfast food, but I can't eat breakfast on the weekdays before school starts...its upsets my stomach cause its too early or something. its so depressing.
and that's good! :D I'm glad:) hahah, thanks for the review. :) Report Review
just so you know, you're gonna have to find me on the forums, I can't use the search feature yet.Author's Response: ahh, okay! my computer is kinda, semi broken right now, so I will as soon as I can...is that cool? I guess it has to be. hahah. Report Review
Who want their 'mascott' to be a lion anyways. They probably shed like there's no tomorrow, and hack up furballs bigger than the stick shoved up my mum's arse.
EW. I think my ears just vomited.
Okay, seriously? Did he get even better looking over the summer? What a jerk.
I seriously laughed so hard at all of these, (in my head, cause my mom's sleeping) great job, I love it!Author's Response: ahh thank you! :D that just made me grin for like ten minutes. I think my face may be stuck in a smile now...I can't stop. THANKS. but no seriously, thanks for the review. I hope you kept reading:) feel free to leave another review...this one made my day:) Report Review
well, if you update soon then I promise that you don't suck!
Operative word being IF, as in IF you update!
Really, please!Author's Response: hahah, I'll try! I'm still working on finishing chapter 5 right now but I want to finish it this weekend. and I'm also starting a new story, so I'm not sure if that's going to be messing up how much I write this story, or if its going to make me write more. :P sooo, like I said, I'll try:) Report Review
Hola :) Another brilliant chapter :) I absolutely love this story, WRITE MORE BEFORE i GO INSANE, okay?
10/10Author's Response: eep. don't kill me. :) thanks! and yeah, I think it gets better as it goes right? RIGHT?! ...yeah. good. :P haha thanks for the review! :) Report Review
HEY! another awesome chapter, I definitely love Scorp and everyone. I'm definitely not confused though, so don't worry about it'!
Keep up the awesomeness
P.S: Í picked up on a few AVP references in the past few chapters and I loved it. ;)Author's Response: hahaha AVPM all the way! :) its my lifeee :) seriously. well, anything hp related is my life. duhh, I mean, like, I was hyperventilating when I went to the newish harry potter park in universal studios in florida. it was so amazinggg. *sigh* I wish I was a wizard. :( ugghh. my life is such a disappointment. ha. no, just kidding. so yeah, thanks for the review! :D Report Review
Well hello Rumblerore, remember me? Since you were reading my story, I clicked your name and found a story that you have written. I love it so far, Jordan's insanity makes me giggle.
P.S: I TOO WILL REVIEW EVERY CHAPTER!
Your welcome :)Author's Response: HI! haha oh my gosh, so I was having a really sucky evening and I think I even went as far as saying that I never wanted to smile again...I know, I sound psycho, but hey, that's what happens when you have a butt trumpet cello teacher...ANYWAYS, I was never going to smile again, blah, blah, blah, but then like 10 minutes later I read your review and started grinning like crazy. soo thanks a lot. you ruined my 10 minute non-smiling streak. :P but yeah, thanks for the review :) jordans craziness makes me giggle too. but then at some parts I just want to slam my head on a table because I can't believe that I actually wrote certain parts. they make me cringe. ecckk. so, yeah. haha, that's basically my life story in one mildly longish response. heheh, okay byee. Report Review
"and can you stop trying to eat my hand please!?" lol and your 4 options, personally playing dead may have been the best option ;)Author's Response: hahaha you know ittt. I love al :) he's my lifee. thanks...! Report Review
" faceplant reminds me of eggplant. Yuck!" lol
Omg and when Jordan is telling albus to sit down almost made me pee my pants! "well I'm in love with...SIT DOWN!" skins Author's Response: oh my! I wrote that part before I even watched skins! that's so funnyy. hahahah. hahahahahah. hahaha. ahhh. ahahahha. hahah. so good. :) Report Review
So I prolly already left a review, but seeing how I read it again I think A second one is deserved. I think you are going a little mushy in the brain area: favorite line :) loved it again budAuthor's Response: ahh. Ã‚Â¡gracias mi amiga! me gusta tu. :)) hahah I don't even know if that's how you would say that...? but whatever. Report Review
"so naturally we bought enough candy to satisfy an entire village"
Favorite line ever!
And I gave you a 9.8 out of ten " because there is always room for improvement ;)"Author's Response: hahahahahahah oh my goodness. I seriously, siriusly, just almost peed my pants reading this :)) soo funny. you're amazingg. :P ...and I'm really sorry for being a slut, okay?! Report Review
Nice chapter keep it up!!!Author's Response: thanks so much. :) Report Review
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