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Review #1, by Kazama Kira His

17th October 2010:
wow nice one shot enjoyed reading it!

Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate you taking the time to say something.

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Review #2, by xtinjsc His

18th August 2010:
Hello!

I noticed that this is your first submitted story. Congratulations! I'd like to welcome you into the wonderful world of fan fiction by leaving you this review.

To be honest, this is the first AU story I've ever read. I'm a big fan of canon, I always like the basic things that JKR established in Harry Potter to remain the same, and I was surprised because I enjoyed reading this. The first thing that caught my attention was the fact that you kept Severus Snape pretty much in character all throughout. Well, except probably the fact that he adopted Harry, which we all know can only indeed happen in an alternate universe, but over all you did a very good job.

His boy. His son. His brat. --> I love these lines. It's very Snape. I always envision him to be a very possessive person, someone who's always wary to be separated with the object of his desire. And the repetition of these lines is just brilliant. It made the whole possessive-obsessive Snape persona shine throughout the story. Well done.

The thing that bothered me a little bit was the fact that Harry in this story was supposed to be twelve, yet I saw him, based on your descriptions of his moments with Snape, as a little boy. Probably about five or six. Remember, the age of 12 is more or less the age of puberty, and during this stage, children are normally angsty and rebellious. Just to give you something to think about. ^_^

Over all, you did a great job. There were also a few grammar-tense-punctuation errors, but nothing major. You can always edit them out. Thank you for sharing this story. You gave us a very entertaining view of Snape as a potential father while keeping him true to his character. I hope you continue writing! ^_^

Author's Response: Well, abused children often revert to acting like a younger age when they are given the opportunity . . .

Thanks for the review!


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