I'm a glutton for punishment. Well Malfoy is almost in character.+1 point. Her name is not a boring sue name antionette which is a lovely name.+2. All the Sue qualities ridicoulous too powerfulness check.The Unpratical and sluty clothing check. Being related to a Cannon character (Snape) Even though he's been shown to be in love w/Lily Potter and loyal to her Check. I'm not attacking you as a writer. I really dislike mary sues

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Yawn!. How the Heck does she take a piss? or clean her self ?. She must smell terrible. Surely she could wear a black work robe. Since that's what the uniform is in the books. Oh Yeah her nickname should have been made toni. That way it would have make a little sense. At least her name is not serina. OMG that's a sue name that has been used to death.

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To Quote Mr.Crocker."F". This is a mary sue . May this Mary Sue feel my flame and may she burn into sparkly dust. Well it's written good. And believe me I have seen fanfics which have pillage the english language . Turning into something that makes highly inteligent proffessors at ivory league schools weep.

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If her clothes never come off, how does she pee? Dear god, she must be filthy!

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This is poorly written and makes little sense. If her clothes never come off, don't they get dirty? How does she take a bath or shower?

I'm not sure that this is salvageable.

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if there was a zero i'd give you that, fool!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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what?! no one else has reviews this?! this is wonderful! keep going because you are very talented! and review our stories too. and don\'t worry, we\'ll give you 5 stars too...

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