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Review #1, by maskedmuggle Heartbreak

8th January 2011:
Wow. I seriously love this! One of my favourite pieces from you so far!
The idea of this is very original, and your writing is brilliant!
I feel so sorry for Molly.. and Roxanne, and Victoire. Nice characterisation, I especially love Roxanne, she seems like a strong person!

Gosh, I loved this line: "Oh, no worries Victoire. We're just here to tell you a joke," said Roxanne. "So, thereís this guy names Teddy Lupin right? And heís a 25 year old metamorphagus. Now, are you ready for the punch line? Heís dating all of us." Brilliant!

And the whole idea with the picture and incendio was clever. Loved this! :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I really loved writing that line, so it's good to hear that you enjoyed it. I'm glad you thought it was clever.

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Review #2, by Jane_Volturi Heartbreak

24th August 2010:
Hi moonbaby11

First of all I would like to apologise for not getting this review to you sooner. I've been very busy these past few weeks and I simply haven't had the time. You mentioned in your areas of concern that you wanted me to focus on everything in general rather than any specifics, so forgive me if this review is a little long; when I focus on everything, I can sometimes go a little over the top with my analysis.

Characterization seems like a reasonable place to start, so I'll begin there. I must say, I'm quite surprised that you chose to use Molly of all next generation characters as your main protagonist; she hasn't really proven popular in other stories that I've read on here, or maybe I just haven't been perceptive enough. It's quite refreshing really to read a story from the point of view of a character that hasn't been explored as much in the Harry Potter universe. What's pleased me even more was the fact that you decided to pair her with Teddy. It's such an unusual pairing and I don't think I've ever seen it before, but don't worry, as far as I'm concerned the more unusual the better, it makes for a really nice change.

I have to say, I love you for not making Molly the usual stereotypical, annoying, cliche type that she's always portrayed to be; it's nice to find that not all authors on her see her as a duplicate of her father, you took the realistic option and I like that. My sympathy does go out to her, what girl hasn't suffered heartbreak in a similar situation to hers? I think she behaved how any heartbroken girl would have done, and I think you do a great job of making the reader sympathise with her character so kudos for that.

Wow, now a womanizing Teddy is most definitely something that I'm not used to seeing on here. I'm really loving the originality of this story so far. I'm so used to him being decent and kind like his father, but you've made him into something quite the opposite and I'm loving it! I suppose a lot of teenage boys nowadays behave like Teddy, it's very much in their nature to do so, and I like the fact that you've kept that in mind.

I'm also not used to seeing Roxanne in fics; she's sometimes briefly mentioned but I don't think I've ever seen her speaking in a story before so yay, again, something different to enjoy! I think she shows parallels to her mother. She seems rather head strong in this story and I like the fact that she isn't taking any nonsense from Teddy. Good for her.

There were a few grammar mistakes in there that you may want to look over; perhaps a beta would be a good idea. Other than that though there was nothing particularly glaring about this one shot.

I really liked the storyline. Like I said before, it's very original and interesting. There wasn't a moment in this story that I found myself bored. You constructed the events in a good way and I really liked the time changes from present to past to present again; I thought they played a very effective role in this story. I was intrigued throughout; you chose a plot theme that many girls can relate to; it was a truly great read.

Feel free to request a review again, I really enjoyed reading this cute little one shot and it's going straight into my favourites.

Katie (JaneTwilight) x

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the long (I like long reviews!) ;) and lovely review. I don't mind that it took you a while to get to it, I know how life can be.

Anyways, I'm glad that you enjoyed this. I know what you mean about Molly and Roxy not being in a lot of fics. They just always seem to be forgotten. :(

I'll look it over and see if I can spot the errors. Thanks! :)

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Review #3, by Sam Baxter Heartbreak

16th August 2010:
Well, I'm finally coming around with your promised review. Sorry about taking so long to get to this piece.

I certainly wasn't expecting to come across a Teddy/Molly pairing, as I admit to being unable to think of him without Victoire. Ingratiated pairings aside, this was lovely. I can just picture Molly's conflicting emotions, as well as her desire for what was. The tiny glimpses you give us of happier times for them through the pictures are wonderful, and I admit that I'd be interested in reading more about them. You're certainly good at lending the need to know more through your writing.

I can't really pinpoint any glaring errors or problems in this, and I think your characterizations of the three girls(what we see of each, as well) are lovely. Your last paragraph was, by far, my favorite section of this. While I might normally have read this under different conditions, I'm glad you requested me to look over it. =)

Author's Response: Thanks for the wonderful review. It's okay that it took a while to get to. I understand.

Anyways, I'm glad that you enjoyed my characterization and the final paragraph. :)

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Review #4, by Galawen Heartbreak

15th August 2010:
Wow what a different take on the 'saint' Teddy we usually see! I'm really glad you decided to do this story from Molly's POV too instead of the usual Victoire. I too loved the line ''one Weasley wasn't enough'' I guess if Teddy was that kind of person imagine how easy it would be for him being the only non-related male at family get-togethers to attract the girls! I'm just wondering though how he would have managed to keep it secret with all of them seeing as I'd imagine they all would have been happy to boast about it! I really liked Molly's purging of her past by the burning of the photos, maybe Roxy and Victoire would have joined her and had some Teddy-bashing! Really enjoyed this well done!

Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review! I'm glad that you enjoyed the spin I had on Teddy. Sure, I love the 'saint' Teddy, but I wanted to do something different.

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Review #5, by HopelessRomantic_x Heartbreak

25th July 2010:
I have never seen Teddy portrayed as the 'sex god/ladies man/womanizer' type. It was very interesting to read something like this and although I really hated seeing Teddy doing something like that I enjoyed this immensely.

I love how you've picked upon one of the Next Gen kids who doesn't stand out to everyone because she's Percy's daughter and that she's expected to be just like him. This proves that she isn't, that she is a normal girl with feelings like everyone else and was put into a situation that is considered out of the ordinary for the Weasley/Potter/Delacour kids.

I loved especially how you started this out, I didn't really know what to expect upon clicking on to this story so I was pleasantly surprised. It's a beautifully written peice and you can obtain the real heartbreaking emotions Molly has when reading this.

I liked how Teddy also showed his affection by changing his appearance and how he would remember and please Molly by giving her that. I thought that was an especially nice touch seeing as he's a Metamorphmagus and it added to the impact of when Molly caught him cheating.

I also was surprised at Roxanne's reaction of having heard that she was also being cheated on, she had a very fiery attitude towards it - quite the opposite of Molly which was a very nice contrast to see. However, I don't feel like I had gotten enough emotion out of her at that moment when Molly confides in Roxanne to what Teddy has done. I think you need a bit more impact, possibly with her body language and the expression on her face to tone it up a bit?

I was overcome by total sadness at the ending of this and how Molly still put the picture into her back pocket. I thought that was a good move to make.

I can't even describe how much I loved this.
I absolutely adored this brilliant piece of writing.

I hope you go on to write more brilliant pieces like this - look me up on the forums or on here if you want another review ;)


Author's Response: Oh my gosh. Thank you for the review. Really, it was lovely to read. Whenever I see long reviews, I always think that people are just going to list a bunch of mistakes that I made, so thanks! :)

I'm glad that you enjoyed this peice. I've never really seen Teddy portrayed like this before, either, but I felt that it fit the peice, and why not I be one of the first to do it?

I'm so glad that oyu thought it was brillian and that you liekd the ending. Once again, thank you so much. I can't even begin to describe how much I adored this review! :D

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Review #6, by Jenna822 Heartbreak

23rd July 2010:
Hello! Thank you for entering my challenge.

Right off the bat, I smiled because what girl hasn't had a photo burning session? I love that you did a Teddy/Molly. I haven't read one of those pairings, so it is exciting to try something new. I'm a big fan of the sweet and soppy Teddy, but I gotta say, you wrote this in a way that may convert me. :D I like your take on him and I always enjoying reading new things. Thank you so much for sharing it. --Jenna

Author's Response: I'm glad that you enjoyed this! Thanks for making the awesome challenge! ;)

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Review #7, by lilypotterfan123 Heartbreak

23rd July 2010:
Wow this story was so good! I loved it when Molly said, But one Weasley wasn't enough. I love the way you portrayed him becuase you'd expect with his parents being very good and everything you'd have thought their personalities had passed onto him. Yet this shows that maybe there's another side to everyone. The description was good and Roxanne was very well matched to my idea of her. The title goes so well it's perfect for this story so much! The setting was good too. The only thing I would say is go into the memories more and show Teddy's time with Molly some more. 10/10 and there really is nothing wrong with it!

LpF123 xx

Author's Response: Thank you for the wonderful review! I'm glad that you liked it. That's a good idea, to go into more about Molly and Teddy. I like it! ;) I'm glad that you enjoyed this.

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