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Review #1, by elegantphoenix It Would Be

9th August 2010:
Hi, it's boysof_p0tterfan509 here with your review. :) Sorry I took forever, life's been so busy.

Well, although it was a short one-shot, I thought it was very good. Sweet and to the point. I think that the ending was a bit rushed, like it sort of jumped from one place to the next without much in between, but overall it was nice. It does, however, make me wonder why they couldn't be together until the morning? I mean, if Draco knew the password to the common room, did that mean that they were in the same house?

It also sort of confused me as to why she woke up in the common room at all, which brings me back to the bit where I said you jumped from one place to the next. I just think that there could have been a little more interaction (?) between the bit where they were talking and then when she woke up. But that's just my two cents.

Again, it was a nice read overall. Thank you for giving my challenge a go :)

Best,
Nadhira

Author's Response: Yeah, I had intended to make it much longer with the whole actual plot after that scene. I just ran out of time. I may go back later and add another chapter and turn it into a short story, because all those questions you raised are answered in my head.

Thank you for coming up with the awesome challenge and thanks for the review!


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