O! You better watch out! You better not cry! Better not pout, I'm telling you why ...
The first thing that strikes me with this cute story is the great structure of it. I love the way you've made it go up and down with Victoire's moments and set-backs - almost like a rollercoaster ride! Her cynical yet dreamer personality is also very endearing, and Teddy seems all too happy to come along for the ride, bless his socks. It's definitely unusual to have the normally daintily depicted Victoire going to study Dragonology, but it's a welcome change! Very original. I like how Teddy and Victoire weren't always together and how it took him a while to realise she liked him (typical boys...), and how they got engaged is cliche but a goodie!
Excellent story here Georgia :) Report Review
awww! cute! lovely!!! Report Review
It's sweet. Teddy and Victoire are totes that couple. The couple that were together before they even realized they were a couple. I love sentimental Victoire, you write her wonderfully. Report Review
Aw! That was so cute! I love how the only dialogue was in italics, totally separated from the rest of the text. All the little episodes from their past together were totally gorgeous, explaining their relationship with little snippets. I don't really know what to say except that it was amazing!
xxAuthor's Response: Thanks for all your lovely reviews of late! I really appreciate them, I'm having a hard time keeping up with responses though (mainly because I'm lazy :P) but I had to let you know I really do appreciate them!
As for this one, thanks so much! I'm so glad you liked this piece, it is a little different to what I usually write.
Thanks again! Report Review
Aww, this made me smile :D
Your writing is just so wonderful! Everything flows and it creates a picture so clearly in my head.
I loved the theme of eternity/the future that was throughout the piece. The last two lines really brought the whole thing together.
-ronsgirl29 Report Review
And super cute.
I'm not much of a Teddy/Victoire shipper, but this was just wonderful. Kudos for making Victoire a dragon tamer! So fierce!
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This was so lovely! I think my favourite thing about it was the fact the style was so simple, and that made everything seem more natural and realistic somehow. Your writing was, of course, gorgeous, but that goes without saying :D
Suddenly every single gesture Teddy Lupin made was filled with a possibility of a future together and every single comment made were sentiments with double meaning, hidden clues of his undying - and, as yet, unrevealed - adoration for her. - I really liked this because I thought it really just captured that optimistic feeling of teenage love when, in your own mind, everything is just perfect and exactly how you want it to be. Bless little teenage Victoire. I also love the idea of her as a dragon trainer! Genius.
Really great stuff, Georgia :) Report Review
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