OKay firstly, I'm glad its Molly who has a crush on Scorpius and not Rose. I've had enough of Sco-Rose to last me a life time. It's become cliche. I don't think I'd be able to bear it if Dominique had to compete with Rose for the boy, lol.
Secondly, I love her nickname! Nicky is different from the usual Dom and much better.
Thirdly, I completely happy with Lorcan and Lysander being toddlers. Canon ftw!
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Scorpius Dominique is a ship I don't see much and would love to see more of. So I'm supremely glad I tumbled into this fic. Awkwardness is in the air. I love how they keep stuttering and mumbling all the time.
Anyway, I'm just going to r&r them all. :)
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Please update soon, this story is so beautiful and different than any other on the site. Looking forward to reading more!

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Ah, so Nicky's suspicions were right. I had a sneaking suspicion that Vic was, too, but she was being positively daft about it. Good to see that I was right, too.

Ha ha.

Your flow and pacing seemed to be just right. Nothing seemed jarringly out of place or rushed.

Your characterizations were beautiful. I love how Scorpius just appears out of nowhere and they snog senselessly for a while. He is really rather sweet and endearing if only a bit oblivious. Dom and Scorp are so cute together.

I do hope that things between Nubia and Freddy get better, though.

I don't know what to think of Claire. On one hand she's highly amusing, but I think someone of her personality would get very vexing after a while.

As far as grammar and spelling go I didn't pick up on anything that needed ammending.

Great job! I really love this story.

♥
Linders

Author's Response: Linders! Oh my gosh, it's been forever! I'm so glad to see you around HPFF again!

Yeah, Nicky was right! Vic is positively daft, and as you'll see, she'll have a bit of a reason for being that way.

Also Dom/Scorp and Fred/Nubia for the win! Nubia will definitely be making a huge comeback within the next few chapters.

Thanks so much for the review! :D

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Wow, that's crazy.

Ha ha! Clearly, I need to go to a Weasley party. I've never heard such random nonsence going on at a party before, but it definitely made for some hilarity.

I especially like that Claire went after James and he seemed to like it.

Still, as crass and ridiculous as some of the people were acting you still maintain a level of poeticism and grace which I find absolutely amazing. The flow and pacing of this piece are quite well thought out.

As far as your characterizations, they are lovely. I love that Lucy is the mature one and Molly is the air-head because I feel that usually when Percy's kids are mentioned that Molly is usually more like Percy. So it was a refreshing change.

Not to mention Louis's escapade with the seventeen year old girls was a bit funny, even if Victoire wouldn't agree.

I felt so bad for Teddy. I don't blame him for escaping his fiancee. I definitely would want to, too.

As for Rose and James - I can see why they would grate on Dom's nerves. They are both rather annoying.

I don't even know what to think of Roxy. She is really rather ridiculous, but you have family members like that.

Good work on this chapter.

It was really fun despite the fact that Scorpius was barely in it.

♥
Linders

Author's Response: LINDERS. I'm so excited to get a review from you again! I thought you'd disappeared or something, so this was a treat. :D

James/Claire...is an odd duo. I'm still at a crossroads regarding them. And glad to know that Molly and Lucy aren't as cliche as they're usually portrayed; I tried to avoid the typical "Percy's daughters" stereotypes.

And Rose, James and Roxy are all based on people I know! They do grate on the nerves a bit, don't they? Haha, I think we all have at least a few family members that are like that.

Thanks for the support! :D



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Another beautiful chapter, as always.

I love your characterizations. Poor Victoire, though, the culmination of all the Weasley/Delacour faults. Surely, she has to have some good traits, as well. We'll just have to wait it out and see, I suppose.

Your originals all seem like good fun, too. I especially relate to Valentina. She reminds me of me, actually. Your characters all seem so real and vibrant, and they've got dimension.

They're not flat characters pasted onto a storyboard. I think that's one of the things I've always liked about your characters.

I'm sorry I'm so late getting to these reviews. I was on a bit of a personal hiatus, but I've returned.

Your prose was flawless and all seemed to fit together quite nicely. I can't help but feel bad for poor Louis who always seems to be getting the short end of the stick and for Scorpius who was getting murderous glances from Bill.

As far as grammar and spelling were concerned, I didn't stumble anything that needed mending.

Excellent work, as per usual!

I can't wait to see what happens next!

♥
Linders

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Lovely Chapter :)
Can't wait to read more!
10/10

Author's Response: Thanks so much! You're lovely! :D

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Filler or not, I always love this story (which means I have to leave a review more regularly, sorry 'bout that). Actually, I'm quite amused by Claire though Dom doesn't think the same way as I do. But anyway, I just love it. Thank you for the update and can't wait for Scorpius to appear again and I'm just curious of what's happening between Fred and Nubia :)

Love,
Go

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Prediction: Victoire's pregnant.

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Wow! I usually hate Dom/ scorpius stories and stories about grown up next- gens, and stories about a weasley becoming estranged, but this story... I love it! Something about your writing makes it feel perfect!

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still love the story, and i thought this chapter was really good :) the fast update was great!!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the continued support! I really appreciate it!

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That wait was awful!
But this chapter was really good, as usual.
Can't wait for the next, this story is so good :)

Author's Response: Ah, wasn't it? :( I'm so sorry about the wait and I'm so glad you're still reading! I adore faithful readers like you.

And rest assured, the wait will be much quicker this time - I've already started the next chapter!


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She (Victoire) is pregnant, isn't she?

Gah! So much drama! (the Molly issue, the Lisette issue, the Nubia issue, the Victoire's "sickness" issue, etc, etc...)

Author's Response: No comment on the pregnancy theory. XP

I hope drama is good? Haha, this story is actually not too dramatic, I think, but what's a huge extended family - and all in their 20's - without a little drama? :)

Thanks for the review!

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You are SO ADORABLE. This fic is SO ADORABLE. My God, I want to squee and puke at how adorable this is. It warms my heart and then I remember that sometimes I'm heartless and... yeah. So. Incredibly. Adorable.

I don't remember if I've told you this, but a few months ago I started reading the whole thing because I hadn't read it before, and even then I was struck by how flow-y and sweet it was. It's not in the same vein as TSOS or something, but it's still got a very lovely, delicate touch and seems much more real. I think it's easier to relate to these characters because of the style you write them in and because they're all really distinct and wonderful.

Naturally my favorite part is the dynamic between Scorpius and Dominique, whose fairly uncomplicated/realistic romance just really rings true and makes me happy. They're so perfect for each other that it's almost sickening, but not quite, because they make me so happy. And I really like how you're willing to turn the attention to other people and pairings, too, like Freddy (LOVE) and Nubia, Louis and Lisette, and (pregnant?) Victoire and Teddy, and the friends (also love.)

So I am well aware of how incoherent/stupid this review is, but rest assured that I really enjoyed this and look forward to seeing more, hopefully much sooner!

Author's Response: Ahh, you do realize this is the first time you've ever reviewed me right?

I'm still spazzing, which is rather odd, considering how much we've talked. XD

Hehe, I actually like this a lot more than TSOS because of the more fluid style and realistic characters. It just comes a lot more naturally, probably because I'm an idiot at heart and the floweriness of my other writing got to me.

I adore Scorpius/Dominique for the same reason and they do remain fairly uncomplicated for most of the story. :) Haha, perfect? I'm glad you think so! It's difficult expressing it without outright shouting it in people's faces. But, using all Scorpius/Dominique would definitely be sickeningly sweet, hence the contrast with Freddy/Nubia, Louis/Lisette, and Ted/Victoire. And I'm glad you like Freddy by the way - I've never really written a character like him before!

I will update soon and I'm so glad you've been reading, even if it's been in secret. xD

- Celeste

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hahaha I've been in the "Can you please talk to him/her for me situations". So amazingly akward and you captured it perfectly.

There was just one thing that bugged me. And I know that its stupid but it gets on my nerves. You said that Nubia swore in Egyptian, when its highly unlikely since Egyptian is an extinct language that died about 1500 years ago witn the invasion of the arabs. Egyptains speak arabic not Egyptian.

Anyway sorry for the lecture and you probaly don't care, but I'm Egyptain and when people ask me if I speak Egyptain, I find the nearest object and throw it at them then give them the full length version on the history of the Egyptain language so you got of lightly.

Oh, and I love the story, keep writing =)

Author's Response: Haha, please don't throw anything at me. :)

I do know the thing about Arabic, though, since I have done research on Egypt and several other countries around the world. However, as a writer, I have to stick to what's realistic versus what may necessarily BE real. What I mean by this is Dominique, who has never left either the UK or France and is hardly worldly to knowledgeable of other cultures is highly unlikely to know this. She's very much a sheltered writer, and later, a sheltered bookstore worker.

As you've mentioned, it's an unfortunately common mistake. It'd also be incredibly random and weird if Dominique would suddenly be able to identify what Arabic sounds like...when other people speak unidentifiable foreign languages, it is the normal and common thing to associate them with the person's nationality. Hence, Mexican people get asked to speak 'Mexican' or Chinese people 'Chinese', when really, there's no such thing as a Mexican or Chinese language.

Thank you very much for the review! No worries, I appreciate the concern on your part, and I feel fortunate to have such detailed readers. :)

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yay loving it so far and loving freddy.
And I love Nubia, cos she egyptian like me =)

Author's Response: Thanks so much and I'm glad you like her! I'll feature more of Nubia from chapter 10 on. :D

Thanks for reading!
- Celeste

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Ah, why do you worry so much? This chapter was absolutely wonderful as were the rest of them.

This chapter was charming and descriptive, and I really didn't mind that it was about Freddy. It added some flavor to it, I think, that it would rather lack if it had simply been the ending excerpt of Dominique and Scorpius.

I think the plot is developing more and more with each chapter even if you won't recognize this fact. ^_~

I'm not sure what I feel about any of Dom's friend's really, so I'm not sure how to feel about Valentina. At the moment I'm torn between admiration and amusement. I'll let you know if that changes.

The whole Hugo and Odette mini-plot is indeed amusing. I can't imagine what she'd see in Hugo if he's really as bad as Dom makes him out to be, but maybe there's more to him than meets the eye.

I can't wait for the characterizations to continue to build. I can't imagine how exciting the next chapter will be. Ha ha, I can't wait to see Bill's reaction. I imagine that Louis is going to be a right prat, though.

I really think you're doing a splendid job with this, and I really have no suggestions for improvement or criticisms.

Your spelling and grammar were impeccable, and as I've already mentioned your descriptions were wonderful as were your transitions.

Great job!

♥
Linders

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Oh, I couldn't agree less. I like how things flow less drammatically here. Well something might happen after Molly discovers the relationship but overall, I love this. It's not boring, really. Fred is ok for me. He's not really annoying, but maybe if he continues this way it will irritate me. But as for now, he's ok for me. However, he really needa to work harder to get Nubia, obviously. Thank you for the update :)

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I really hope things work out between Nubia and Freds.

And Dom and Scorpius are so dang cute, I could squeal!

You're a really talented writer and I hope to see more great stories from you :)

Update soon please!

Author's Response: Haha, thanks so much! :D Your reviews always keep me smiling, and I do promise to update this story soon!

- Celeste

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Oh I love Astoria and Draco here and I honestly thought that Draco's garden gift is so romantic. Honestly, they had a great story back then and thank you for letting us know in this chapter. OMG at last, Scorpius and Dominique are finally together. I know it will come sooner or later and I just love that. What happened between Louis and Lisette? Something...bad? Asdfgfda, I'm curious. Thank you for the update :D

Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much! I think Draco's gift is beyond lovely as well! :)

And yes, they are finally together! I had so much fun writing that part. :D

As for Louis and Lisette, I'm afraid we'll just have to wait and see, yeah? Thanks so much for the support! I really appreciate it! ^_^

- Celeste

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Another beautiful chapter, I must say! :)

I found a couple of errors, though: She was short, with a sweet face and clear features. Her white silk robes flew in the winds and she chucked to herself, before turning to me. I think you meant chuckled.

Also, you say here that Astoria's robes are white, then somewhere else you say that they are grey. Just thought I should point this out to you.

Other than that, I didn't find any other grammatical or spelling errors, that I found.

Your characterizations were wonderful.

Hehe, yay! Nicky and Scorpius are official. How lovely! I was wondering when that would happen, but I'm glad that it took a while to do so. I hate stories where people get together too quickly, in all honesty.

I really liked Astoria. She seemed different from so many other people's takes of her, and it was a breath of fresh air. As for Draco, I don't know how I feel about him. He seemed canon, though. I can't imagine that he'd deign to talk to a Weasley girl. Not unless he really had to.

As far as Lisette and Louis go, I'm not sure how I feel. We didn't really see what happened to her, so I'm neutral to him. I don't think he's a proper jerk. At least, not from this chapter.

I loved the interactions of Dom with both her family and Scorpius'. They were different from anything I've read before and quite interesting.

The descriptions, of course, are very lovely. They seem to flow sweeter than the nectar of honey.

Great job!

♥
Linders

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The little bit between Fleur and Bill and the kids was so cute! I like the way you portray their family! Now that I think of it, you make out the Malfoy family to be just how I imagined it as well! Well done on that!

Can I just say: SQUEEE! Scorpius and Dom are official!

This story is great. Can't wait for an update :D

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your continued support! Reviewers like you are the reason I can keep writing. :-D

Yeah, I love Nicky's family too. Fleur and Bill have a good dynamic, as do Draco and Astoria.

And yes, they are! It's so exciting! =D

Thanks so much! I'll update soon!

- Celeste

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Love this story! :) Can't wait for the next update :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much! :D I'm so glad you liked it! ^___^

- Celeste

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Oh I don't know, I think i kind of pity her now. Such a sad past. But I hope Fred could somehow change her mind soon because I'd love to see more Fred-Nubia.but yay,more dom and scorpius. Totally love that. Sorry for the short review and thank you for the update :)

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i just love your story ! i can't wait till you update.

Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much! :D I'm already a good part into the next chapter, so an update should be coming hopefully soon! ^_^

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