Nice c: I really like then together :3 (i don't know why)Author's Response: Aww, thanks for this sweet review. :) Report Review
Hi there! Phoenix here from the review tag!
I thought this was a great idea. I saw one or two grammar errors here and there though. Also, I think you could of added more detail, like how the weather conditions were, and how they were talking... little things like that could really help. I also think you could make it less fast? It you know what I mean... :P
But I remember my first story for a challenge... it wasn't so good... :P
Maybe you can get a beta to read your story, they can do wonders. o.O
Over all I thought this was a cute read, and I can't wait to check out more of your stories!Author's Response: Hey, thanks for your review! :D
I didn't plan on revising this story and I know that there must be many flaws in it. At that time I never really thought about details until I read stories that had such great descriptions and details in it. That just changed my whole writing and I try to put more details in my stories nowadays.
I know how great beta-readers can be and I will consider getting one.
It's great that you liked it. :)
Xxx SLG Report Review
I LOVE IT(L)
Oh I just love them! They are so meant to be!Author's Response: TY so much! Report Review
So I see your story's up! Make sure you post a link to it in the First Date Gone Wrong thread, so I know it's up, or I'll have to myself!
-ronhermione4evrAuthor's Response: oke., i will do it! Report Review
I love it so far! So sweet how he saved her!
But I'm not sure if I will like it anymore when the date goes wrong, unless they will still end up together happily of course!Author's Response: Oh, it will end up all good! Report Review
So you DID finish it! ;D
G'luck. :)Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
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