Loved it! Such a cute story!
The ending was great! I didn't expect that!
You got me curious about Victoire's house.. would you have put her in Gryffindor?
Lovely writing as always :)Author's Response: Hm, I'm really not sure where I would put Victoire. Probably a Gryffindor though. ;) Report Review
Aw... this is absolutely adorable! Love it!Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! :) Report Review
I really liked the story it was so cute and light-hearted. I love it when a story is more of conversation and less of descriptive detail. Nice going! ^^
Oh, here's a few typos you missed:
“Come one, let’s get inside. --did you really mean "Come one" or "Come on"/"Come little one"?
Victoire nodded, and stayed where her father had told her to, talking in all that was around her. --I think talking in should be taking in.
And that's about it! ^^
xoxo SeverusLoveAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review! I'll fix the typos up, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story! Report Review
that was really good
it was hilarious as well
i started cracking up when they found dominique on the train
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Wow. Just wow. I loved the direction you took with this story and how you stayed so true to all the characters (and making them your own). I was thinking about entering this challenge as well, but I don't think I can beat you! :)
Loved that Dominique was a stowaway! Great job!Author's Response: I still think you should enter the challenge. Who knows, you might even beat me! :)
Anyways, thanks for the aweosme review! Report Review
This is so cute ! :) Teddy's last year would be Dom's first :)Author's Response: Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
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