Rather interesting story ;) Report Review
Good chapter, your writing is smoothing out. Short chapter but is better than nothing, and gives us a bit of something to get us through till the next chapter. 7/10. Really looking forward to what Kinsgley has to say. Happy writing!! ~Lauraf68Author's Response: Thanks Laura, I really appreciate your reviews and advice! The next chapter will be up when I get the chance. Thanks again! Report Review
i loved it please write more to itAuthor's Response: Thank you! More will be posted soon, and rest assured I have plenty written out in advance! Hope you keep reading :) Report Review
...and the plot thickens! I'm very interested to see where you go with the non-traditional Hogwarts student. Should be very entertaining to see her take on the Ministry and the rest of the Wizarding world. Keep it up!Author's Response: Thanks! I'll post the next chapter soon, keep an eye out! :) Report Review
Much smoother. I liked how expressed her emotion, excitement, and apprehension. Looking forward to the 'investigation' and maybe some answers. Have a nice holiday. ~Lauraf68Author's Response: Thanks for the review, and thanks for reading :) Report Review
All in all I think the premise is good. But the chapter seems a bit dry, short, and forced. I'm confused why your Professor McGonagall is being so rude to Daisy. This adult found magic would be such an odd thing I think McGonagall would be more curious of Daisy's background and speak to her in a more of an adult manner, not like a misbehaving 13 year old. Again I think your premise is good, slow down don't rush it. I look forward to seeing more.
~~Lauraf68Author's Response: Thanks for the advice, I really appreciate it! I can definately see what you mean, and will try and improve my writing!
Thanks for reading and reviewing :) Report Review
I really like it! im not much of a writer so i cant really help you! sorry!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! It doesn't matter if you can't give me advice, the fact you spent the time reading and reviewing means a lot :D so thanks! Report Review
it is really good please wright more it is so interestingAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
i love it its really goodAuthor's Response: Thanks for your review :) I'll post more when the queue reopens! Report Review
Coool! I like it! But only 4 chapters? I thought that there were nine of them. 9/10 'cause i want to know the end!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I've now got 11 chapters written, and they're getting posted about once a week (when the queue opens again) so keep reading :) Report Review
Just found your story. Very interesting idea you have here. I like it! You say you dislike cliffhangers, but you certainly like suspense---VERY interested to see how you explain Daisy getting her powers so late in life. Happy Writing!! ~Lauraf68Author's Response: Thanks for your review, the next chapter is in validation but the queue has closed now, so hopefully it'll get validated not long after the queue opens again! I hope you keep reading :D Report Review
Don't worry about the length; end a chapter wherever you feel it best. I'm interested to see where your story goes, as I like the concept of late-bloomers in regards to magic.
I'm looking forward to seeing where this integrates into Hogwarts. Keep it up.Author's Response: Thanks, I appreciate your opinion! Thanks for the review, the next chapter is in validation and should be validated today hopefully :D Report Review
Great start! You have a really good beginning here; it is well-written and you introduce Daisy well. I felt really sad for her when Jason broke up with her, when she thought he was going to propose. I'm angry at Jason too; long-distance relationships can work, or she could have gone with him!
You've done really well to get the reader feeling the emotions of the character so early on, well done! I'm surprised Diasy's magical powers haven't fully come through yet, as that stage (blowing up windows lol) normally stops at 10/11. So I'm intriuged to find out why she didn't get a Hogwarts letter, etc... Please update soon, this was really good!
P.S. Thanks for your review on my story War Is Over... it's really appreciated :-)Author's Response: Thank you so much :D I really appreciate the review and feedback and everything :D
I'll update soon, I have plenty of chapters already written out, so the story shouldn't dry up hopefully :)
And you're welcome :D Report Review
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