Reaally great first chapter! I love the chatty tone of it all. Keep it up!Author's Response: Thank you for the review! :) Report Review
This is such a great story! I love Cassidy and Al together already, and Al's plans are really funny. Please update soon!Author's Response: Hehehe, thank you!! ^_^
Al's plans are... yeah :P I love 'em too.
I'm starting to write the next chapter soon, I'm just figuring out my POV issues right now.
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It was really funny! LOL I hope you like reviewsAuthor's Response: Aww, thank you! :D 'Course I do, they're like my monkey energy battery!!! Or, well, something XD
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Best chapter yet!
Me and Alice - who found it even funnier and didn’t make a single move to, oh, I don’t know, help me, maybe? - I mean. Not him.
That sentence was a little confusing because of the digression about Alice finding it funny thoughAuthor's Response: Oh, wow, thank you! :)
Um, I think what I meant was, that she and Alice were on the way to the Great Hall, not she and him. Also, Alice found it funny, because, well, her best friend being dragged into a broom cupboard by a lunatic thinking he's madly in love with er, must have some laughworthyness (not a word?) in it. I think.
Thanks again for the review and I'm glad you liked it :)
“Why does everyone insist on laughing my behalf? Anyway. There’s this girl,” he started again.
The first sentence in there doesn't make sense. If they laugh on his behalf, you're missing a word.. but that means that they're laughing for his benefit. Might be simpler to just say they're laughing at him
Everything else looks great!Author's Response: Err, yeah, that's most probably wrong, I'll try and fix it as soon as it's possible, English isn't my native language and I haven't studied it all that long, so there are times when I'm going to slip up. Thank you so much for pointing it out, though :) And, also, for the lovely review :D Report Review
I was a Saturday night in late November. Alice and I were just sitting by the window, away from everyone else, when it happened.
Should be "It was a Saturday..."
Other than that, amazing job! Loving the plot and character interactions. Really liked the Crickets. Awkward silence. Really described things well. The spacing is a little excessive though- it would be easier to read with more typical spacing just because we're used to it. Excellent word choicesAuthor's Response: It should, I'll fix it when I edit that chapter next time. Thanks for pointing it out, btw (:
Haha, I was starting to doubt if the crickets were a good idea or not, so it's good to hear someone saying they liked that part :D
You mean like the spaces between the lines, right? if that, I can't really help it, it annoys the living babanas out of me, but I've no idea how to fix that. :s
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ahhh! okay so I don't think I've left you any reviews at all yet but I figured I might as well since I love writing reviews :) a lot. really. its my favorite thing to do. right behind eating peach rings and calling people british insults. yep. my life in a nutshell. ANYWAYS, I really like this story. it had me cracking up randomly. and I actually am driving in a car with my family and I starting smiling and giggling when scorpius fell. I think I made a squeaking noise to try to keep myself from laughing but they looked at me like a was a freak anyways. sweet. but yeah your characters are great so far :) I love al. sooo much. I'm basically just going to marry him. that's a promise. just kidding. I wish. sigh. ...okay, on that awkward note, I can't wait to read the next chapter!Author's Response: haha, thanks :P It is fun insulting people with British words... especialy if they dont understand what you said xD
lol @ your car-reading :P that must've been... awkard. xd
AL'S MINE!!! ... no, just kidding. Well, not really. *le sigh*
Um, I should get it out, er, sometime. I'm updating my two other stories right now and I'm a bit confused as about whose POV I should right in next, so we'll see if I actually get anywhere with anything ;P
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Please write so more!Author's Response: I will, I'm actually working on the next one now, so yeah, thanks for the lovely review!! ^_^ Report Review
scorp is so damn funny! well done. caused me to laugh quite a bitAuthor's Response: Aww, he is? Thank you :D
I've always thought him to have kind of a quirky mind... ^_^
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Oh I love your Scorpius, I really do. He's cute, sort-of, and what I would't give to see a cute silly Malfoy. I lol-ed when his hand was stuck on his head. Is he stupid or what, but still he's adorable. Love that. Thank you for the update( and pardon my short meaningless review)Author's Response: Haha, I do tooo :D
Yeah, he is... he isn't stupid, he's just... slightly disturbed XD
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Oh god!! I couldn't stop laughing half the time! Oh it's been soo long since I've laughed this much! Seriously, you're brilliant!! If I were to quote all the lines that made me laugh this review would be extremely long! I loved the toilet conversation in the previous chapter. And I liked the unique portrayal of Scorpius. I think I'll quote one but it's so hard to choose one ;)
'"Really?" Al asked and kneeled down before Scorp and took a swig from Eau de Cheesy-Sock-Smell of the carpet. "EW! How can you do that?"'
Great story and plotline. Update soon?Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review :D
Hehe, I liked that too ;P
OMG, fave lines ^_^ haha, I loved writing that scene (:
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I love this chapter, you write Scorpius so well! :D
I'm glad that you updated when you did! It's cool as most people are just editing, so it's awesome to read a new chapter. You're a God.
This chapter is so witty, and the reason that they got kicked out of the library made me chuckle, a lot.
Update soon!Author's Response: Heh, thank you (:
Yeah... I kinda doubt that :P If I was I'd have that neon yellow ring shining above my head...
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waaah more albus/cassidy action next chapter! i love this story, though. i can't wait to see al come up with another (not so brilliant) plan. i want to see cassidy go crazy! keep writing.
ALSO, who is that girl in your banner?Author's Response: yeah, we'll see ;P I haven't started writing it yet, though :S school's been crazy energy-downer on me. I won't stop writing though, so don't worry ^_^
As for Cassidy... erm, we'll see XD
And, uh, that girl in my banner is Gia Farrell :) It's a pretty commonly used/overused pic, so you can find it just by Googling her (:
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Oh, so Albus did try to grab her and I assumed the plan didn't work that well? Oh well, that was interesting, and embarrassing for Cassidy. But I get a little bit confused here, she said she didn't have a crush on Albus at the first chapter but suddenly, she did? Otherwise, love the whole story, can't wait for more :)Author's Response: Yeah, he did grab her :P
Hm, no she didn't, she was just embarrassed/very pissed off/speaking very sarcastically correct sentences. Or something. XD
*okay, I don't know if I just made any sense whatsoever, but fine*
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Albus better come up with a pretty good plan if hes going to win the heart of this girl! More soon please! And more Al! hehe. I heart Al. *Sighs* Why can't he be real?!?
Er. more soon? Yeah! More soon!!Author's Response: Haha, the best thing at Al's plan is that it isn't Al's plan... :P
Yess, Al is very heartable XD *swooon*
More comes.. semi-soon (:
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This is interesting(:
Update soonAuthor's Response: Thank you! ^_^
Chapter 4 should be up soon... ish :P Report Review
Awww this is really good. I love the awkward things that happen to her. She's gonna have fun trying to stop the future ;)
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Hahah, y'think so? I do hope so :P
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I really like the start of this. Can't wait to see if Al's "plan" works. More soon!Author's Response: Hahah, thanksss (:
Well, it could...maybe. I'm not sure.
Chapter 3 should be up pretty soon-ish. I hope :P
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"For Merlin's striped bathrobe's Sake! Do you understand me?" I've found my new favourite saying! :P
How has this story not got hundred of reviews yet?! It's literally amazing! I can't wait for the next update.
I love Rose in this, she is so funny. It's like she has the wit, sarcasm and the brains, a lovely and at-time-helpful package. :)
I can't wait to see his next full proof plan, it's really sweet the way that Albus reacted. Update soon!Author's Response: Hahah, thank you :)
I can only dream of hundred reviews, I'm afraid, but it's a good dream XD
I've written chapter 3 already, but I'm just editing those small annoying bits that just hate going right atm; I think it should be up pretty soon though! :D
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I'm really loving this! :P I can't wait to read the next chapter.
I like the way that she hasn't gone absolutely gaga over Albus - I'm putting in a 'yet', just in case! :D
Alice seems like fun. :) Update soon!Author's Response: ah, thanks (:
hahah, well see ;)
Chapter 2 is in the queue, thank you so much for the review! ^__^ Report Review
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