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Review #1, by Dalek194 Fallen

8th July 2010:
Good start. It is very sad, how the reader knows Lynn only has a few days left, but still seeing Luna visiting her, and Lynn thinking the pain will stop soon. It is well-written, but the chapters could be a bit longer. I like how you've included a prologue in the chapter description, but some people don't read that, so may miss that part.

I spotted a small error; you said Luna was careful not to pull out any of her tubes, but then suddenly Harry took her out of the bed and into the car without any mention of such tubes. Still, you have done well here, please update soon!

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