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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by N/A It’s all about lying…

23rd November 2010:

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Review #2, by rowlinghermione It’s all about lying…

1st July 2010:
The only small criticism that I have is that it was slightly random. Make things flow a little more and this will be amazing.

Good chapter. I like the plot.

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Review #3, by Cinderpelt4 It’s all about lying…

27th June 2010:
cRazy , totally random

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Review #4, by lunarocks14 It’s all about lying…

27th June 2010:
Hehehe! Justin Bieber, I love his songs, awesome story :)

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Review #5, by lunarocks14 It’s all about multitasking

27th June 2010:
Haha, awesome idea! It sounds like a normal school. xD 10/10

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Review #6, by rowlinghermione It’s all about multitasking

26th June 2010:
Just a little feedback on the chapter (please don't yell at me for it. It's just a few suggestions as to how to make the future chapters a little better). And I could picture what was going on in your story happening, and enjoyed the drama aspect of it as well as the introduction of the couples.

Multitasking? I'm not sure, but if I had written this I would have made the title "Popularity" or something along those lines. No one is really multitasking in this chapter which is why I wouldn't have named it that.

The story is a little dry. Add more details (location, clothing, what's going on in the character's minds, references to the past, etc) to make it a little more interesting. Show, don't tell.

At the end of the chapter, Hermione and Draco start talking about going on a date. You said earlier that Draco could not ask her because of his popularity. So, where is Draco asking her out? Include the ask out for a little more meat to the chapter, and if two people are going to yell "fine" back and forth, add in descriptions. Maybe the first time he can be rolling his eyes or saying the word quietly "Fine." while at the end he can yell "FINE!!" See how the image is different between the two?

On the front page of your story it says that it is a Novel, but it also says that it's completed at the same time. Just wanted you to know that.

This has a nice storyline to it. Keep up the good work=)

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