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Review #1, by MariOrdonez i wish i was beautiful

30th April 2011:
love it!! but love u moree

Author's Response: hehe, me too mari :D

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Review #2, by Owlpost68 i wish i was beautiful

29th March 2011:
WOW. That was a great story. I love all the metaphors, I thought that was really funny. There were a lot of spelling mistakes though. it'd be smurfs, not snurfs. but there were a few others in there too. The end was such a shocker! I can't believe it! But couldn't Lorcan help her out? I mean, the other guy needs to know, but it doesn't have to matter. I think Lorcan should be there for her anyway. I still love the story even with all the spelling mistakes :) great job!

Author's Response: thank you!!! yeah, i got a little too late that they are smurfs, so that sucked butt there :p but no worries, I will be editing and sending it off again so maybe you can enjoy it better :D i dont know, really, but i guess he was so shocked he just passed out xD and i do think he would try to help her out in anything.
thanks so much!


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Review #3, by Me i wish i was beautiful

23rd December 2010:
Very powerful :)
Loved it!
...and I dont know what to say.

Author's Response: oh yay! i made something powerful... i feel mighty.
thanks!


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Review #4, by Olwyn i wish i was beautiful

19th December 2010:
Hey there brain twin :D
This piece is pretty interesting, I rather enjoyed it. :D

I love the snurfs. Are they snurfs or smurfs? I don't quite get that, but its funny.

I really love the feeling that Dom has in the beginning, where she wants to be beautiful. It's a really strong feeling that a lot of people can relate to. I think you should expand on the fact that she's always been hot, never beautiful. It really gives a lot of insight into the character.

I think that you should add something that is a line that explains a bit why Dom can't let Lorcan think she's beautiful. Maybe something like," ...maybe, she thought him beautiful too. But that wasn't allowed, she couldn't think that." Just a thought, to provide some foreshadowing.

Speaking of foreshadowing, the Dom at the beginning doesn't seem like the Dom at the end. Pregnant Dom and hot Dom do not match up very well, and I think you should adjust that. If Dom is pregnant (which she is, duh), then she really would be more worried that the father of her baby is falling for her baby cousin.

I love love love Lorcan. Your characterization of him is perfect. :D

It's a great story, really beautiful. A lot of it is really relatable.
-Brain Twin :D

Author's Response: thanks so much brain twin! ill have to edit it with your suggestions and stuff :) i did realize the foreshadowing thing and how she cant think he's beautiful after reading your review, and ill be sure to adjust it. thank you twin :D
and i made Lorcan perfect? Awesome!
thanks so much!
-brain twin :D


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Review #5, by Black_Lupin_Ravenclaw i wish i was beautiful

16th December 2010:
WHAT! SHE's pregnant...?
LORCAN! I love him SOOO much! He's, like, my favourite character! (What about James? You ask... Well, I like him too, but Lorcan is so... i don't know... sweet?)
And a little action... at least some loving going on :) I like that (you might know...)
And I love Dom too... can't believe she's preggers! Damn you, Gabriel, Damn you!
And I love the whole 'mini-Dom snurfs' thing. So cute! :P

Author's Response: I LOVE lorcan too! a bit obvious given Dom Weasley's Guide to Life... and yes, i hate Gabriel too. he doesn't love her, he loves Lily. Gr.
And I ADORE snurfs. So effin' cute :D
thanks so much!


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Review #6, by LunaMALFOY i wish i was beautiful

4th December 2010:
wow. that was a very different approach at writing. it was so weird and different, i quite enjoyed it :p poor dom and lorcan. i never expected the end. good job!

Author's Response: thanks so much! and yeah, the end was quite surprising :D

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Review #7, by Junie i wish i was beautiful

6th July 2010:
Aww- Finally read it, its so cute yet sad at the ending!! My fave part:

(-Am I beautiful?-

Lorcan kept his gaze on her amber gaze and responded, -Yeah, you are.-)

Poor LorcanxDom :( Its hard deciding which of your Doms has it worse: the drug-addict or this one!

The Smurfs were funny too, and her weird daydream leopard-thingy xD

Agh, even your funny ones end up sad!

Author's Response: this was not the funny one :) thanks! i love SMURFS :)

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