I honestly enjoyed reading your story so far. Especially Eliza, she's so very refreshing and unusual, though resembles Luna Lovegood in more than one way. That's a good thing, though.
However, I figured you might want to change your "Guy Fox" to fit the actual "Guy Fawkes" who took part in the Gunpowder Plot. The Guy Fawkes Night, including bonfires and effigies, was originally celebrated to commemorate the fact that the catholic conspiracy didn't succeed in overthrowing the protestant king and establishing a catholic one instead.
It's fine if you can't be bothered to change the lines, I'm just a nerd when it comes to historical figures, grammar, spelling, you take the gist.
I hope you could find my review useful.Author's Response: Oh man, thanks I feel like a fool for not realising that myself.. Thanks a bunch : ) Not sure when, but eventually I'll get around to changing it.
I'm glad you like the story!
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I absolutly loved reading this story. I think that Eliza is an amazing character and your portrayal of Albus is one of my absolute favourites.
Thanks for sharing such an amazing storyAuthor's Response: Awh, I'm glad you like Albus, throughout the story I just needed it to be believable to have him in Slytherin. I'm glad I created a favourite : ) haha, thanks so much for the review!
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You're fantastic. so so amazing! I love the characterisation of Eliza! Seriously, wow. Best story I have ever read. And I really wish it hadn't ended there. But wow. I loved it.Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review, I'm really happy you liked the story. This is a really nice review and I appreciate it a lot.
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Beautiful...wonderful...extraordinary story. Your OC and Albus are perfectAuthor's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing : ) Such a lovely review, I'm glad you enjoy the story as much a I do Report Review
This is beautiful , it's funny and Eliza is such a beautiful , well written character , A young Luna Lovegood but original ! Thank you for writing this ;)Author's Response: Thanks you for reviewing, I'm really happy that you like it. I'm glad I wrote it Report Review
LOVE IT! Eliza is wonderful. And her relationships with people were lovely, she is very real, her floating is endearing. i really liked it.Author's Response: Thank you for your reviews! I'm beyond happy that you loved this story and Eliza. Thanks you
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this is going to be good, i am already excited to see what can happen to this little girl. I am still waiting for my letter, ahahhaha Report Review
I really liked it. It was a bit rushed and the writing could use some fleshing out, just stuff that comes with practice. It was good, though Eliza was hard to connect with, since there was nothing about her that was like anyone else, had there been just something it would have helped with the emotional connection. But either way, still loved it, it was great!!Author's Response: Thanks for the review :) Your criticisms are very constructive and have given me plenty to think about. While I wont re-write this story, I'll keep it in mind if I ever write another one. Report Review
Neville Longbottom??? HANDSOME?!Author's Response: I'm not really sure what to say? It's a student crushing on her teacher who has a heroic past... I know I've been prone to thinking my heroes are more attractive than maybe they are...
Thanks for the review, I hope you enjoyed the chapter : ) Report Review
Original story. I like it so far. Need to google tips on writing third person. I am learning how to write better as well, and I have found many good articles explaining the differences in third person styles.Author's Response: Thank you, I like it. Thanks for the advice, I'll look it up. Report Review
Very good story! I love ur character eliza and hope u will write more about her life after hogwarts. Will she marry albus? Wat will her job in the wizengamot consist of? Will she have children and wat will motherhood be like for her? These a few questions im sure others will want answers to as well! Keep up the good work!Author's Response: Thanks so much. Interesting questions, perhaps I'll ponder on them for a while ;) Report Review
I think your story was really amazing and beautiful and awsome and great and everything.
I enjoyed reading it a lot.Author's Response: thankyou so much : ) I enjoyed writing it! Report Review
aw, cant belive its over, well apart from the epilogue :) really, really amazing story! you're brilliant! loved all of it! please write more stories!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I definitely looked forward to your review : ) I'm actually in th process of writing a new one as wll as completing my other WIP that's already posted. Thanks for the encouragement and compliments! Report Review
Oh, I love Eliza too.She's so sweet, she's like an angel. I loved this story and the ending is great. I'm so happy I've read it.
vicky :)Author's Response: I'm so happy that you enjoyed reading it : ) Eliza is my favourite : ) thanks for reading and especially for reviewing : D Report Review
It's ending... I missed a few chapters but it's great!
Happy endings and all :)
Oli boy's appearance was a little abrupt but cute and funny x3
Especially like the little "I love you"'s and the part where Albus throws all the candies at Damien >W<
Post the epilogue soon! ^^
Can hardly wait,
Angelic FlowersAuthor's Response: Thanks for reading! I wrote the oliver bit a really long time a go to be honest, I never even thought of it being abrupt. I suppose I'll have a look at it.
I'm glad you liked the chapter, I almost potsed it like three times but just wasn't sure if it was good.
Again, thanks for reading, epilogue will be up in a week. Report Review
wow! I really love your story and of course Eliza.
I can t wait to read more!Author's Response: Thanks for reading : ) I'm really excited that you love it, thank you for reviewing, read on! Report Review
Wow, who knew Scorpius was that insightful?
I'm absolutely in love with this story. Do post the next chapter as soon as possible! :DAuthor's Response: Haha, thanks for the review, next chapter will be up soon! Report Review
wow -brilliant chapter! pleasepleaseplease update soon! loved it - im so addicted! you rock! :) 467648165845214521754715647526754725 billion/10! ;pAuthor's Response: Thanks so much : ) should be able to post the next chapter once the archives are back up Thanks for reading and reviewing, you make my day! Report Review
Hi! I just found your story. It has been fun to read as it developed through the chapters. Nice work and I look forward to reading more!Author's Response: That's great! Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
wow, again a brill chapter, pelase update soon! loved it, as always :)Author's Response: Thanks so much : ) Currently working on the next one, It will be up in no more than two weeks : ) I need to go back and go over some of the chapters to check the flow.
Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
I like the changes. Your writing is improving :PAuthor's Response: Duuude.. some critique you are : P
Thanks : ) it was bound to happen eventually Report Review
aw poor eliza! loved thechapter! on my kindle again sorry this is short but pleasepleaseplease update soon! loved it you rock!!Author's Response: I wish I knew what a kindle is : P Thanks for reading and reviewing, feeling very compeled to go hash out the next chapter. Thank you, you rock : D Report Review
heheh, great nickname for Al, loving the Rose/Scorp as well, they've always been one of my favourite couples :) amazing chapter (again!) must read on! 800/10! so good!Author's Response: Haha, I can't even remember how I came up with it.. I think there was an elvis movie on or something. Yeah, it would have been weird not to include them, I'm sure you'll enjoy further chapters! Report Review
yes, Al does seem a bit of a prat, but i love him anyways :)
a-ma-zing chapter!! seriously, im hooked on this fic! you're amazing! loved it! 500/10! :)Author's Response: I'm glad you like him : D He is pretty important! And Thank you Sosososo much again Report Review
aw, Eliza is so sweet :) and Rose is too, i love how you write her: sometimes she's the 'gossip' cow in fics, so it's nice for her to be the best friend ;p loved the chapter! 400/10!Author's Response: Yeah, I enjoy how I wrote Rose in this fic. I'm glad you liked the chapter, I'm always going back over it because it introduces everyone in such a short time frame. Thanks for reading Report Review
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