ummm... why is this chapter posted after the previous one? cos the story doubles back on itself this way.Author's Response: haha no idea. i wrote this story ages ago and i'm too lazy to fix it. Report Review
They were bored so they got married... *snorting* what a nice way to cure boredom. GC! GC stands for Great Chapter, btw. Report Review
I have a hunch... I just hope I'm wrong. Lol, I seem to like borrowing quotes off HP. Report Review
In any case, I'm just glad Ron and Ginny are all right. But the sooner they catch Reid and the other bastards, the happier I'll be. Report Review
OMG IS THERE A FREAKING TRAITOR? IS THE WITNESS A FREAKING TRAITOR! IF THERE'S ONE TYPE OF PERSON I DESPISE, IT'S TRAITORS! Is it me, or do I sound like James Potter? He hates betrayal... Report Review
That was great! I will check if you already posted that sequel right away, and if you haven't yet, please hurry up! This story had the right length, right amount of suspense, right amount of romance, right everything... and of course, I find myself loving it.Author's Response: ahhh, yeah. about that. no sequel. gave up on that ages ago. sorry bout that. Report Review
it seems that chapters 15 and 16 are switched... just giving you a heads up!Author's Response: qwertyuiopasdfghjk Report Review
Loved your story, read the whole thing in one sitting!! You have a very descriptive way of writing, I could picture everything... Look forward to reading more of your stories.Author's Response: Thanks! As for more stories... well, I'm working on it :P Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
I do like your stories and try not to review after each chapter.. That is like trying to judge the taste of a complete hamburger by eating the pickles only.. You do a smashing job. The only thing that seems to stick in my mind though... Is that if Harry is the Head Auror, he would not be taking on a recruit as a mentor. That is what the Senior Aurors are for..(based on knowledge of law enforcement experiences)Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I guess this is true... I think that things changed maybe after the second war. thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Very, very nice story. I liked it alot. no complaints from here!Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it :) Report Review
aw i love the ending it was so beautifully writtenAuthor's Response: Aw! Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
not bad its nice to get some other characters life stories tooAuthor's Response: I'm happy you enjoyed it :) Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
nice makes u want to keep reading lol im already hooked lolAuthor's Response: Thanks, I'm glad! Report Review
not bad i cant stop reading lolAuthor's Response: haha thanks! Report Review
still like it lol moving on to the next chapter right nowAuthor's Response: I'm glad you still like it :) lol Report Review
i love how u wrote this it goes along with the books im reading the next chapter after i post this i will keep u informed on how i enjoy it lolAuthor's Response: Thank you! Report Review
good Job. I enjoyed reading your story.Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
I really liked the scene at Hermoine's, very well written and thought out.
I've actually really enjoyed the novel so far. If I could offer some constructive criticism, I think some of the other scenes, and especially the ones involving the Aurors and their investigation of the crime scenes feel too much like a Muggle police investigation. For example, it's possible that T.H. was hiding with a Disillusionment Charm. To me, this is something that would be at the front of the Head Auror's mind with years of training, and it's not addressed at all. I feel like the magic side is augmenting what would be a Muggle police force instead of the other way around, if that makes sense.
I feel like I should be more specific. To me, when the Aurors would first arrive on a crime scene, especially connected to the Dark Mark, they would cast a spell like "Hominum Revelio," be much more cautious with the possibilities of a magical ambush. These are Dark Wizards, and I think it could really add to the climactic cliffhangers you've given us so far.
Terribly enough, Ron's torture scene was one of the best in the book. You could see that magic made things like unbearable torture easy, and that that's the kind of thing that Aurors have to deal with when confronting magical enemies.
Hope my constructive criticisms makes sense and that they're taken with the knowledge that I think the book is quite good. Looking forward to reading the rest!Author's Response: Thanks, I totally understand the things you have pointed out, and I'll keep them in mind while I'm writing the sequel. Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
wow. During the dog parts, I laughed so hard that I cried. You're amazing! Hahaha---conserving Phantom's manliness! Ginny is the sweetest. :DAuthor's Response: I'm glad I made you laugh :D Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
What i want to know is why your chapters keep on getting rejected? they seem fine to me. As always, GREAT WORK!!Author's Response: I've only had a couple rejected chapters... You probably wouldn't see what was wrong with them in the first place because I fixed it. Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
One word: WOW. And that you are awesome. And that this is an amazing storyAuthor's Response: Thanks so much! Report Review
I love you. You are an amazing writer. :)Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much! Report Review
I loved your story! it was definitely one of my favorites on this website(: write more!Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it. I'm writing the sequel now. (:
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It was okay but I don't like how you tell the exact times. Otherwise I liked it!Author's Response: I'll keep that in mind for the sequel. Thanks for the review! Report Review
I have read your whole story in one night and have been extremly happy with the story. I think you have made the the perfect mix of action and romance and conjured up a story that i personally did not want to end. Please write more as i enjoy your writing style and well thought out chapters. GOOD JOB i loved it.Author's Response: wow. I'm glad you're happy with it, and that the action/romance bits worked out. I am currently writing the sequel! I'm on chapter three. :) I'm going to start posting it once I have written the whole thing, this time, so that there are not huge gaps of time between chapters. Thankyouthankyouthankyou for reviewing! Report Review
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