Wow. I'm speechless. :D That was the best story ever! In one chapter, you got it all. All of it! Good-girl Hermione, Bad-chic Hermione, and lover-gal Hermione. :D :D :D :D I honestly don't know what to say. :D :D Report Review
That was one of the best masterpieces of writing I have ever seen. Beautiful, dark, and sinister, but full of hope, sadness and sorrow at the same time. Brilliant work. Report Review
Well first of all, thank you for entering my challenge! I have to say I like the raw emotion from Hermione; it makes the story more real, you know? The biggest issue I have is the idea of Hermione falling in love with Percy of all people. It seems a little unrealistic, but I did enjoy the dialogue and exchange between the two of them.
There were some grammar errors within sentence structure but it was still pretty well written. Since the theme was 'break my heart for love,' I do wonder who was breaking the heart. Was it Percy, who erased her mind? Or was it Hermione, for killing him because she cared for him. Wow did I even make sense? lol
Again, thank you very entering my challenge. I have yet two more to read before I make my decision on the winners. Good luck! =)Author's Response: :) Thanks! Report Review
wowowowowow!! I cannot even begin to tell you how much I appreciated this story. My favorite part was, "He kissed my other cheek, dampening that one as well. He drew back slowly, and looked me in the eyes. I saw my heart there, staring at me. Haunting me." I think that you are a great writer. The winner will be posted tonight on the forum so be sure to check it out! Thanks for participating in my challenge and I hope you check out my own stories on HPFF.Author's Response: Thanks so much for your challenge! I wanted an excuse to write an angsty Percy/Hermione story, and your challenge was a great inspiration for it. :) I'll be sure to check out your stories.
Very different, but I enjoyed it. Despite Hermione being a little OOC as you put it, there was still a good bit of Hermione-ness in her behaviour anyway.Author's Response: Thanks! I figured Hermione killing anyone (especially a Weasley) is OOC off the bat, so I might as well put the note there for certain purposes.
Thanks for reviewing! :) Report Review
Wow, who knew that Hermione would love Percy and then kill him? I like this one shot. It is very well written.
-LauraAuthor's Response: Thank you soo much! :) I love angst, but not as much as I love Percy/Hermione. Report Review
One word describing this... amazing. I absolutely loved this.
Any chance of more of this? Nice work. =D
10-10Author's Response: Thanks so much! :)
Oh there's definitely more than a chance of more Permione. Not sure about another dark, angsty one (this one was incredibly somber to write!) but I have a Hermione novel in the vault that you'd like. I'm in the process of writing the eighth chapter right now. It'll be up as soon as the second chapter of my OC story leaves the queue and I get my Percy/Oliver story up.
Thank you so much for the review! I'm so glad you liked it. :) Report Review
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