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Review #1, by Echo95

18th June 2010:

Okay! Good start, but the end is a bit rushed and hard to read. She's obviously getting married and having a flashback, but what is her second anniversary? Two years after their first date? The tense is a bit awkward, but maybe some tweaking would make it easier to understand. You have a good plot, but maybe a little more build up to the kiss? Maybe a couple days of classes and awkward conversations, she wonders why it's so hard, perhaps because of their parent's pasts and then he kisses her? You have a pretty good start here, though. Nice work!

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Review #2, by Icy_devil

Chapter One

15th June 2010:

Interesting! Can't wait to read more! Good job!!

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Review #3, by MistressOfMarauders

Chapter One

14th June 2010:

Nice and concise. I have a feeling that this story is going to gather a great deal of followers (it deserves to). I'm excited to see what happens next!

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Review #4, by bespontaneous

Chapter One

14th June 2010:

this is a different story line from what i'm used to seeing on hpff
and it is very exciting to see a different point of view,
i can't wait to see this story really take shape[:

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