A very interesting chapter you have here.
I am a little disappointed that Michael insulted the girls. I am sure that you had a good reason, but I found it unusual. Maybe you can fit a little more into why in later chapters. I'm not saying change it. Just a bit of a shock there. Hermione's reaction to it was almost perfect Hermione. Nicely done. I can't wait to see what happens if/when Michael finds Hermione.
I am looking forward to when Hermione tells Ginny about the date. I get the feeling that it is going to be a good chapter regardless of which way Ginny goes with it.
Good Job all the way around.Author's Response: Haha, thanks. Yeah, I had a good reason... ;) It gets interesting :) Report Review
I like the fact that someone likes Hermione other than Ron. It is a good thing. Hermione accepting the date was also good.
Her thought at the end of the chapter was so in character. I hope she tells Ginny soon. I can't wait for her reaction, regardless of what it is.
The chapter could use a little more detail. Hermione's feelings when she talked to Michael might work. It's just a suggestion. No big deal if you don't want to.
Good Job all the way around.Author's Response: Thank you! It was my first story, so I know it was really lacking in detail :/ But thanks, I'll be updating soon :D Report Review
Cute chapter. I like how Michael is reacting to Hermione. I also like how Hermione is reacting to Michael.
Telling Ginny I don't think is necessary. As a matter of fact, I think that it would be more interesting if you let Ginny find out on her own. But then, that's just me. ;-)
I like how you are developing the story. I can't wait for other chapters to arrive. You are doing a good job, keep it up.Author's Response: Oh, thank you :)
Yeah, I'm planning on Hermione telling Ginny in the next chapter.
Thanks for the great review! =] Report Review
Hmm no typos this time. I'm really annoyed at Hermione now b/c she isn't telling Ginny! Doesn't she know that will only make things 10x worse?!Author's Response: Haha, yeah, I've planned out when she tells Ginny...
But don't worry, she'll tell her soon :) Report Review
Oh poor Ginny. No scratch that, poor Hermione she'll have to deal with the wrath of Ginny and her bat-bogey hex muahahaha! anyway, typos:
"Nope, we can leave as early s we want," Michael replied. s>as. P3,Line20.Author's Response: Thanks for pointing that out!
sorry, I'm terrible at proofreading.
I'll change it.
Thanks anyway :) Report Review
I really like this story so far. however (not to be judgmental or anything) you DO have a lot of typos. Here they are:
"Harry, Ron and Ginny had Quidditch PRACTISE">practice.-1Par, 2sen.
"She put he bag full of books..." he>her. -1P,4S
Anyway, I love your desciption of Michael Corner. :)Author's Response: Oh, oops!
Sorry, I'll change those whenever I get a chance.
Thanks for reviewing! =] Report Review
Good chapter. I am hoping she tells Ginny soon. I also have a hope on Ginny's response, but I won't give it away. ;-) I can easily read how Hermione is feeling; it came through nicely.
Nice job, keep it up.Author's Response: Thank you so much :D
I'm glad you like it =]
And, yeah, she'll tell Ginny soon. Report Review
i loved everything about it. : )
please write more chapters!! ; DAuthor's Response: Thanks so much :D
I'm in the middle of writing the next chapter :) Report Review
That was still a pretty good chapter! Ofcourse i like it!
I love how you did it in Micheals and Hermiones POV. (:
I was thinking maybe if Hermioen ever tells Ginny there could be a part with Ginnys point of veiw?
Just a suggestion.
Can not wait for the next chapter!
If you get the chance feel free to check out my fanfiction! (:
~AUTUMN!~Author's Response: Thanks =]
Haha, yeah, I'm going to do that.
Hermione will tell Ginny at the end, I think.
I'm in the middle of writing my next chapter now.
And, yeah, I'll check out your fanfiction :D Report Review
g r e a t. As always!
~AUTUMN~Author's Response: Thanks so much!
Glad you liked it :D Report Review
Just as great as the first chapter!
It is rather short, but thats fine... i like short chapters! (:
~AUTUMN~Author's Response: Thank you! :D
I was in a rush when I wrote it, but I'll definately write longer chapters in the future. :) Report Review
That is really good, very good first chapter love it!
I love the ending aswell!
~Autumn~Author's Response: Thanks for the great compliment! =] Report Review
this is going to be AWESOME!!
Please keep writing!! :D :D :DAuthor's Response: Thanks! :D
I'll write more soon :) Report Review
This is a nice idea for a fic. You have a good sense about the topic. A little more detail would make this really stand out.
Nicely done thoughAuthor's Response: Thank you!
I know, I'll add more detail in the later chapters.
Thanks so much =] Report Review
Don't put yourself down, you write great. At least you can write more han one paragraph without getting frustrated and quitting; that's better than I could have done.Keep up the good work. =]Author's Response: Thank you very much =]
Your compliment means a lot to me.
Haha, I've often said I was giving up, but I just start over ;)
Thanks again1 :D Report Review
Love the story so far!
Hope you write more soon, XD.Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you like it.
This is my first fanfic, so I really appreciate it :)
And yeah, I'm writing more. Report Review
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