This is good :) But I can tell straight away that you probably aren't actually English. :P
Keep it up thoughAuthor's Response: I'm glad you like it and thanks for the review. You are correct, I am American, and after past failure at writing as if I am English, but have discovered I am not very good at it, so I am just giong to do the the best I can. Thanks for the review.
SIRIUS! Blah! I want to cry for him! Good chapter, i love it and Sirius!Author's Response: I'm glad you like it and thanks for the review. looks for a new chapter soon. Report Review
Update soon! I love this chapter, but Like i said, Gideon is still a little fake, and i love sirius, soplease update soon.
10/10Author's Response: I'm glad you like it and will try and get out the next chapter soon. Report Review
I love Sirius so much! I think that Gideon is very fake, sorry, and he annoys me, and I.. Love. Sirius way to much! Haha Love this chapter
10/10Author's Response: I'm glad you love Sirius (he's my favorite). I'm sorry Gideon annoys you, but it means I'm doing my job. I know he's a bit annoying, and a bit fake, but I'm modeling as some kind of a mix of Edward and Fred and George. Report Review
Oo! I love Gideon, he's so Romantic! And Sirius is adorable and wonderful and well, he pretty much says it all ;) Love this chapter
10/10Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it thanks for the review. Report Review
Awesome chapter! I like this story alot and Sirius and Faith are cute! Keep writing :)
10/10Author's Response: I'm glad you like it and thanks for the review. Report Review
Ooooh, Yes, that was EXACTLY what I meant by more detail at the end! Brava! It is true that there are some suggestions I gave that I wish you made, but it was already great before I butchered it and it's even better now! I LOVE the decision to go with the eyes--in case you haven't noticed, eyes are very often used in my stories for imagery. The imagery of all the blues in the room was FANTASTIC and took my completely by surprise. I also really liked when you said that he was even more handsome in the dim light. All very descriptive! Good job!! :DAuthor's Response: I'm glad you like it, and thanks for the extra review my lovely beta. I hope I added enough of your suggestions to make you happy, but anything I left I thought was better left. Thank you so much for all your help, I think you are truly helping me make it better Report Review
sigh. th emention of the Prewett brothers make me so sad.Author's Response: I'm sorry they make you sad, it was so completely unintentional. I just wanted to bring in more characters to the plot. Thanks for the review. =) Report Review
that was really cute keep writing.Author's Response: I'm glad you like it and thanks for the review. I already have the next chapter up for validation, so have no fear. =) Report Review
Very cute! Please keep writing!
I love Sirius stories.Author's Response: I'm glad you like it and thanks for the review. I agree, I'm a huge fan of Sirius story.
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