This is an absolute beautiful story that I am so glad that you requested me to read it. The flow was just wonderful carrying the story at a steady pace but was enough to keep the reader from getting bored. I also like the storyline that you have used here as it is something that I personally haven't seen played out before so it was a nice refreshing little story for me to read.
Also you writing style is so magnificent and elegant that I was able to picture the two of them laid together at the base of the tree. Your description of the scene was faultless! The only thing I don't like is that there isn't any more of the story to read as I would have gladly read on had this been more than just a one shot!
Please feel free to re-request for any other stories that you write!
~Hallows! Report Review
That's lovely, the way you tell the story of their relationship as aspects of it come to mind because of things he notices during their afternoon together. It's sweet that that they both are thinking about marriage at the same time, too.Author's Response: Thanks Rose, that means a lot to me :) So sorry about the late reply, limited internet access will do it lol. But thank you, I do appreciate it :) Report Review
Before I review, I just wanted to say that I love your author name =D Bobby dazzler...reminds me of a show in Britain where the presenter likes to say that. Just made me smile.
Anywho, sorry for the digression and back to the review.
I've never really read a Charlie/oc but I saw your name and thought I'd give it a go and I'm very pleased I did =]
It was written beautifully and I really believed the story you told
A great oneshot, thanks for writing it!
spam_up_samAuthor's Response: Haha, thanks. Bobby Dazzler is very special to me as it's something my pop used to say to me when I was very little ("she's a Bobby Dazzler"). It's a term of enderment popular in Wales, so that's why I chose it :)
Thank you very much for your kind words. I'm very pleased that you found this one shot believable, especially given it involved an OC which are always slightly harder to set up properly in a canon world. I'm very glad you enjoyed it though, and thanks for taking the time to leave a review. Have a great day! :) Report Review
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