This was beautiful! I've never really given much thought to the fact that Fleur would possibly leave her family, but it does seem kind of likely, as I never really saw her as one to settle down and lead a normal life. I love the bond you drew between Vic and Dom, and I love Dom's certainty about everything. You did an excellent job with this fic, and my praise will never do it justice.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

Wow... I really don't know what to say to this! It means a lot to me, really, that you would drop by so unexpectedly and leave such a lovely review!

Again, thank you! I appreciate it more than you know.

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Oh Rinni, it's beautiful! I really love it a lot. Very sweet, and very tender. Heartbreaking. I think you've really hit the relationship between the sisters on the dot here. Poignant. I think that's the perfect word to describe this piece. I'm sorry I haven't more to say, I'm tired :P

But this is so lovely. So perfect. Excellent story darling.

xoxo
Shiloh

Author's Response: Gah, thank you Shiloh! You have no idea how much this means to me. :) I mean... wow. Thank you!

Again, thanks for the review. I appreciate it so much!

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RIN! -squishes- This is such a lovely one-shot, and sad, too. I especially loved the bond between the two sisters, it reminded me of the way my sister and I were when we were little. I'm wondering whether Fleur left because of Bill's drinking, or if he started after she walked out on the family. I'm inclined to think he started after as I don't want to imagine anything that might paint Bill in a negative light as I like him as a character. Over all, though, I loved the description and narration and you truly have an amazing writing style that grabs the reader's attention as if they were going on a journey through the characters' lives rather than just reading what happens. Great job. 10/10

Author's Response: Mac! Thank you so much! -squishes-

I don't exactly know the order of events, actually. You bring up an interesting concept: did she walk out because he was was drinking, OR did he start drinking because she walked out? We'll never know! MUAHAHA.

Thank you so much! I tried to think about the bond between my sister and I when we were little, and I'm really glad you liked the result.

Thanks again, Mac! You are lovely.

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Rin ♥

This was so a absolutely beautiful one-shot!

Description -
Secretly you are by #1 favourite descriptive writer. I love your description because it lacks the heavyness of others and has pace. Even in one-shots you are able to still twirl the description in whilst creating pace and a storyline, it is a really admirable strength.

Characterisations -
I really liked your characterisations throughout this. I thought your history of Bill/Fleur was just enough but was not gone into too much. Even as a minor character throughout this I thought that Bill was characterised beautifully. I really felt sympathetic towards him and whilst he was sort of unfriendly to the children, I felt as though he had a reason to be. I also loved your characterisations of Victoire and Dominique. Victoire was characterised beautifully as the older wiser sister who had been old enough to remember their mother, whilst Dominique was the younger inexperienced one that asked questions. I thought here you wrote them exceptionally beautiful as young children and I loved the way heir characterisations worked together. I also thought that the characterisations you used her made excellent foundations for the future, you really created this strong bond between the two girls without going in to too many words. I also loved how the girls used the term "maman" despite never being taught french. I felt like this sort of showed their heritage and that even without being taught the language they were still unconciously aware of it.

Plot -
I also absolutely loved the idea behind this story and how the girls named the Cherry Tree 'Maman' and the way this story developed right from start to finish. It was rich with description and the flow was gorgeous.


This truely was a wonderful one-shot Rin! I really really enjoyed it as I always do with your work, you never do disappoint :)


10/10


xxx

Author's Response: Aw, Kaity! Thank you so much! I... don't even know how to reply. So here's what I'm going to say:

I love you. I love your reviews. I love your words. I love your reviews. I love you.

- Rin ♥

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Rin.

Holy wow. I'm not sure where to begin. This is a beautiful one shot. The image that you have beautifully painted of Bill's family is so different than other's I have read. The opening interaction between the girls and their father really put me off of him. I was taken aback by his behaviour, and curious for an explanation. Once the girls found the cherry tree, I knew that it had sentimental value. In my heart, I feared that Fluer had died. My family has a lilac tree planted over the pet cemetery (animals are integral to the family structure :P), and I felt that a similar motiff would occur here. It would certainly explain Bill's ill-temper and alcohol issues. When I found out that Fluer had walked out, I was stunned.

Dom's innocent insistance that the cherry tree was maman's tree was heartwarming and heart breaking at the same time. I loved the life you gave to the two young girls. The little details, such as Victoire never learning french, brought depth to the family structure. Fluer had never bothered to teach her girld her first language. As per usual, your description was wonderful and captivating.

All in all, this fic was stunning, emotionally effective, and beautifully written. Props!

-xx-
melissa

Author's Response: Oh goodness, Melissa, what a gem you've bestowed! Thank you so much! I mean... wow. Thank you. I can't even begin to express my gratitude for such a lovely review.

I'm really glad that you liked the girls. They kind of reminded me of my sister and I, though we haven't lost our mother or anything like that. Still, I was trying to make them as realistic and innocent as possible, so I really appreciate your comment on them! Thank you so much!

Again, thank you. I'm just... gah. Blown away. Thank you so, so much. You've absolutely made my week.

- Rin
xo

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awuh, this is so good! i love the way you write, you're so descriptive and you really capture my own imagination. deffo 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really, really appreciate the review. Again, thank you!

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