I loved this story. I love how relatable this is for people that either feel like their parents aren't there or they truly aren't there. I relationship between the girls is beautiful and your words to describe it are amazing.Author's Response: Thank you so much! I always feel like it's difficult to portray specific relationships, so I'm pleased that you thought this one was readable. :)
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though i hated the fact that fleur left, i absolutely love this. it was amazingly written! honestly, it was so... poetic. words cannot describe it.Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! I really appreciate the review. :) Report Review
This was beautiful! I've never really given much thought to the fact that Fleur would possibly leave her family, but it does seem kind of likely, as I never really saw her as one to settle down and lead a normal life. I love the bond you drew between Vic and Dom, and I love Dom's certainty about everything. You did an excellent job with this fic, and my praise will never do it justice.Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Wow... I really don't know what to say to this! It means a lot to me, really, that you would drop by so unexpectedly and leave such a lovely review!
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Oh Rinni, it's beautiful! I really love it a lot. Very sweet, and very tender. Heartbreaking. I think you've really hit the relationship between the sisters on the dot here. Poignant. I think that's the perfect word to describe this piece. I'm sorry I haven't more to say, I'm tired :P
But this is so lovely. So perfect. Excellent story darling.
ShilohAuthor's Response: Gah, thank you Shiloh! You have no idea how much this means to me. :) I mean... wow. Thank you!
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RIN! -squishes- This is such a lovely one-shot, and sad, too. I especially loved the bond between the two sisters, it reminded me of the way my sister and I were when we were little. I'm wondering whether Fleur left because of Bill's drinking, or if he started after she walked out on the family. I'm inclined to think he started after as I don't want to imagine anything that might paint Bill in a negative light as I like him as a character. Over all, though, I loved the description and narration and you truly have an amazing writing style that grabs the reader's attention as if they were going on a journey through the characters' lives rather than just reading what happens. Great job. 10/10Author's Response: Mac! Thank you so much! -squishes-
I don't exactly know the order of events, actually. You bring up an interesting concept: did she walk out because he was was drinking, OR did he start drinking because she walked out? We'll never know! MUAHAHA.
Thank you so much! I tried to think about the bond between my sister and I when we were little, and I'm really glad you liked the result.
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Holy wow. I'm not sure where to begin. This is a beautiful one shot. The image that you have beautifully painted of Bill's family is so different than other's I have read. The opening interaction between the girls and their father really put me off of him. I was taken aback by his behaviour, and curious for an explanation. Once the girls found the cherry tree, I knew that it had sentimental value. In my heart, I feared that Fluer had died. My family has a lilac tree planted over the pet cemetery (animals are integral to the family structure :P), and I felt that a similar motiff would occur here. It would certainly explain Bill's ill-temper and alcohol issues. When I found out that Fluer had walked out, I was stunned.
Dom's innocent insistance that the cherry tree was maman's tree was heartwarming and heart breaking at the same time. I loved the life you gave to the two young girls. The little details, such as Victoire never learning french, brought depth to the family structure. Fluer had never bothered to teach her girld her first language. As per usual, your description was wonderful and captivating.
All in all, this fic was stunning, emotionally effective, and beautifully written. Props!
melissaAuthor's Response: Oh goodness, Melissa, what a gem you've bestowed! Thank you so much! I mean... wow. Thank you. I can't even begin to express my gratitude for such a lovely review.
I'm really glad that you liked the girls. They kind of reminded me of my sister and I, though we haven't lost our mother or anything like that. Still, I was trying to make them as realistic and innocent as possible, so I really appreciate your comment on them! Thank you so much!
Again, thank you. I'm just... gah. Blown away. Thank you so, so much. You've absolutely made my week.
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