I just HAD to read this; it's probably the Indian in me :D
I was born in India, and my family immigrated to the US. I was only there for about 8-months to a year before moving to Dubai, but we go back there every few years, and I don't know...There's just something about the place.
Yes, some of the streets are dirty. There's poverty. But there's magic. The monuments hold magic, and still stand regally. Even the lowest beggar will welcome you to his home and share what little he has. You won't find kinder people. Every thing about it adds to its charm.
I must ask; are you Indian yourself? If you aren't, then this is probably the best description I've seen of India from a non-Indian person (and people who aren't Indian either!). If you are, then yay :)
I love the delicate writing style, and how you're taking a character not often seen or mentioned in the books. It's so unique and insanely well-written.
And if I'm being honest, it's exactly how I felt after moving to the US.
Please update more of this soon please! I absolutely cannot wait to read more of it.

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''Muggles were still there, but an odd spark, a woman never growing old, soft, bodiless voices whispering in the wind…I thought perhaps India had seen it before. India was never surprised, merely politely curious.''
You write beautifully. I don't have any other words to describe it.
I haven't read any stories on either of the Patil twins before, so I can't compare, but I have to say that you really nailed Padma's character.
Are you an Indian by any chance? Because your descriptions were perfect. And it's not scattered at all.

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oh, this is lovely so far. i love the writing style. :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I love that you have read and continue to read so much of my work and review every time. It's really sweet and I appreciate it a lot :D

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Wow. I've never read a story focusing on Padma (or either of the twins) but I'm so intrigued and excited to continue reading this.

Great start.

Recenseo 2012.

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I actually really didn't think it was scattered. I thought this was a great first chapter. It caught my attention. Padma is someone I have never read about before and I love how you have woven India into the story so far, even though it's mere thoughts about it and distant memories. You paint a beautiful picture.

Author's Response: Awesome, thank you! Writing about magical India was certainly a stretch of my imagination, but I'm really happy that you liked it! Thank you for reading :)

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Keep writing! Please?! This story is awesome, I love the idea!

~WR

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I will ^_^

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