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Review #1, by Dalek194 The Beginning

4th July 2010:
A very good start! You have written it well and I like the way you've made the two new characters in Charlie and Elizabeth. I'm also glad it is a good-length chapter :-) It's very enjoyable to read, as you never know what might happen next.

James seems a little bold when he meets Charlie; she could be a Muggle who doesn't know anything about Hogwarts for all he knows, but I suppose that's just James :-) The Marauder's meeting defies JK's version in Snape's memories in Detahly Hallows, but I supoose you have to do that to add in the new characters.

James once again shows his boldness when he talks to Lily, but remember; I doubt they even know eachothers surnames yet, let alone James wanting to marry her; they are 11 and he doesn't even know her yet lol :-)

All the same, you have done really well here, I enjoyed it, and I definately think you should continue. Please update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, you're the first person to review this story, and for that you should win a medal or something, but I don't have any, so just imagine it okay? Anyways, thanks a lot. I did try to make James kind of bold, I was happy you could tell. Thanks!

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