you should really finish this. Report Review
Okay, bit of a tense problem here. It suddenly shifts from past to present which is a little confusing so I'd watch that. Loved the steamy dream :D hehe. Again, bit more description couldn't hurt and a slower pacing. Imma add this to my favs to keep an eye eh ;) Kay~ Report Review
Okay, just happened to pass by this story by chance (I love Hermione/Older men stories but sadly there are far too few on here!) Anyway, great story you have going. So far I like though I think I could flow a little better if you slowed it down and separated the paragraphs for easier reading. Hermione is in character though I'd like to see more description of Remus and his mannerisms etc. Also the dialogue is a bit clumped in areas. I like so on to the next chapter! (btw the part where Hermione say she doesn't know whether the clerk's a man or woman made me lol) Kay~ Report Review
This is great! I've been waighting for your update for a while. This is a interesting rate at which the story is progressing. Report Review
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